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[talon]

The phone rings, and rings again, and again, and finally goes to voicemail. This is Jared, a familiar voice tells him. I can't get to you right now, but let me know I can do and I'll be there to help. Leave a message!"Hey," he says, after the beep, "I wouldn't be calling you right now if I didn't need it really badly, but I've just been... it's

Comments

[jexia]

Sadly believable :( NZ has had a quite a few violent incidents involving P, including someone who robbed an RSA (Returned Soliders' Association) with a machete, and chopped someone's hands off.

[talon]

Oof. Stuff like this is terrifying :(

[suesniffsglue]

Wow. Really effective way to tell your story. The news story at the end added so much for me. This was a really creative approach to the prompt.

[talon]

Thank you!

[lrig_rorrim]

The quiet despair in this piece is really good. I mean, really sad, but really well-expressed.

[talon]

When you have no choices left...

[kickthehobbit]

This...reminds me rather a lot of what happened with a friend of mine after he became addicted to cocaine (and, well, later, something else).

I feel odd saying it, but you write about addiction really well and the weird spiral that it draws you into. This was hard to read but...well-done.

[talon]

:(

[i_17bingo]

this'll help. it offers hope.

Oh, yeah. That's not shady.

You really brought us deep into sympathy with this character; as someone who has depended on drigs throughout his life--both pharmaceutical and "herbal"; both for good and for bad--I highly doubt I would do things differently than David. And that's what makes a story like this particularly scary.

[talon]

Yeah - there's something to be said about how much brain chemistry tweaking we do nowadays.