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With My Heart Ticking (Like a Bomb in a Birdcage)

Jul 01, 2012 16:21

with my heart ticking (like a bomb in a birdcage) | zayn/niall; background harry/louis; ot5 because that's my real weakness here | 3,101 | pg-13 | it was like, he tried to explain to liam once, having a sun blazing in his veins, or tucked away in the hollow of his ribs | because every pairing needs a shitty superhero au! (aka who let me near a ( Read more... )

zayn malik, niall horan, one direction, zayn x niall

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loribeast July 1 2012, 20:43:13 UTC

i think i've told you how much i love your zayn/niall, but i'll tell you again because ajdhkg this is perfect <3
i'm getting so many ziall feels at the moment, and this was lovely and sweet and their dynamic is always great in your fics
pls never stop ok

bloodofpyke July 2 2012, 05:18:35 UTC

oh wow thank you so much, that really means a lot <3333

saycomfychairs July 1 2012, 21:16:20 UTC

YOU ARE WONDERFUL. This is so fun Leah! You created such a playful world and I am in love with it. Though you wouldn't be you if you didn't also make me feel feelings. FATE? REALLY? YOU WENT THERE? SO RUDE I DON'T WANT TO TALK ABOUT IT. The banter while Zayn was getting ready to meet Niall was especially perfect. As always I loved it completely. Well done!!!

bloodofpyke July 2 2012, 05:17:36 UTC

i'm making the most ridiculous face at my computer right now :')

and thank you i love you and your words are the literal best, so this really means a lot <333

pendules July 1 2012, 21:33:14 UTC

this is ridiculously delightful. :D ♥

bloodofpyke July 2 2012, 05:16:23 UTC

thank you!!!

cityskiesx3 July 1 2012, 22:28:50 UTC

OAIAKSDGJHB LEAH (that song goes perfectly with this, btw. i played it while i read ^___^)

first, just the nit-picky stuff out of the way
when zayn says,
“Just in case you ever not need saving again.”
the grammar seems a bit off? maybe don't/do not instead of just not.

and also i was slightly confused at this part,
“Yeah,” Niall told him, moving closer and kissing his neck.
“Could be persuaded, I think.”i obviously know (*waggles eyebrows*) what niall wants to persuade him to do but is there a line of dialogue missing here? jw ( ... )

bloodofpyke July 2 2012, 05:20:42 UTC

ahhh i knew those bits were a tad off, i should have edited a bit more before posting, i think

but !!!!!! thank you so much omg

(also if i get around to writing the second part that i've been bouncing around for the past day or so....it will be angsty, i think; i can only do fluff for so long i guess haha)

and let me smooch you because you're the actual best person ever and i love you <33333

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bloodofpyke July 2 2012, 05:16:14 UTC

thank you so much <3333