Did you even read it, or just glance and see the word 'Donnie'?
Anyway honey, the first thing I have to say is that so far you're doing great. There's some grammatical errors, and double ups of words far too close together (for example: "I am decaying in a guise of perfection. My guise of false mascara eyes and thick red rouge." Try changing the first to facade, maybe
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Hi. I feel so bad for saying that I was leaving and not giving an address out to people. I never thought I would make real friends that actually care enough to reply to my journal stuff
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Ohhh, I like that idea! You may not have even thought of it, but Scarlet is a pretty symbolic name in this context. I like how it works... red usually symbolizes passion or sexual maturity, so it's really fitting for a story like this
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OMG THANK YOU SO MUCH. I am excited :) You rock... do I know you? I barely ever use this journal but I had to post to get some help on this. my real journal is http://www.ujournal.org/~xxfakeasmile Hope you're there so you'll add me. I'll try the tone thing but I'm not sure how to build up and drop hints about how she doesn't like where she's living.. it'll be hard because I also want to put in how her mother's husband left her because he was gay! lol.. it's like a soap opera. I'm not sure what to do, I'll try. thanks so much about the makeup stuff, i really wanted to know! i cant believe you found out that this took place in that era.. i thought of ditching that idea because it seemed too subtle.. was it really clear that it was in that era? thanks for the makeup im gona put that in. yuck though! lol :)
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fuckinnerbeauty is not an average rating communty. We're newish and have some interesting quirks. We need some new members to add to our happy little family. It would be awesome if you tried us out, be warned though...we're pretty picky. I'm sure you'll do fine though! thanks alot!
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sorry I get confuzzled easily -.-;
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Anyway honey, the first thing I have to say is that so far you're doing great. There's some grammatical errors, and double ups of words far too close together (for example: "I am decaying in a guise of perfection. My guise of false mascara eyes and thick red rouge." Try changing the first to facade, maybe ( ... )
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You have to update me when you finish this story.
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Hope you're there so you'll add me. I'll try the tone thing but I'm not sure how to build up and drop hints about how she doesn't like where she's living.. it'll be hard because I also want to put in how her mother's husband left her because he was gay! lol.. it's like a soap opera. I'm not sure what to do, I'll try. thanks so much about the makeup stuff, i really wanted to know! i cant believe you found out that this took place in that era.. i thought of ditching that idea because it seemed too subtle.. was it really clear that it was in that era? thanks for the makeup im gona put that in. yuck though! lol :)
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