Sasunaru islove

Nov 11, 2006 21:25

Hey.. I tried to write a one shot sasunaru..kinda sucks but meh.. xD i tried ( Read more... )

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lilmisssushi November 11 2006, 10:56:00 UTC
...LOL.

LOL. Oh man. LOL.

...I think this is one of the most random things I've ever read XDDD.

Some of it was really good, but it's just so...disjointed. It's like this is a direct feed from your brainwaves as you dream or something. Seriously. Umm. I don't know. I like reading your writing a lot, but you should read this over maybe a week from now. And um. See what you did. XDDDDDD.

The smut...just...well. Something tells me you'd really like the Naruto 'uke' site.

I think if maybe you could smooth this out then it'll work. The scene set-up at the start was good, but the last part was definitely rushed.

Anyhoo! It'll be cool to read some more of your stuff soon-ish!

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lilmisssushi November 11 2006, 10:57:04 UTC
Oh and for the love of goshies, learn to use the lj-cut!!

You'll probably kill Kevin's and Soo Chong's unwitting eyes with this! =P

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kruzadar November 11 2006, 12:39:13 UTC
sif my eye's are unwitty, i just don't like to read stuff that involves "boy love" and "naruto" >_>;

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lilmisssushi November 11 2006, 12:40:40 UTC
'Unwitting' as in 'unsuspecting', you.

Oh, and probably wise decision. XDD.

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