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[tastelikeapples]

I am so not happy with this scene it's not even funny. I mean, okay, yeah, I'll freely admit to making up everything regarding the demi-demon's up rather than doing research properly like I ought to have, but even so.

This is like a bad scene from a zombie flick. Complete deus ex machina action sequences. WHY do I persist in writing action

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[saintlyloins]

I don't know why you don't like it. I think it's awesome.

[phoenixeiros]

Wee, I liked it too. It seemed a tad sudden after the last post, but then I'm not really one to talk, so it's all good.

Wee like zombies. Flesh-eating goodness and all.

[tastelikeapples]

*Waves arms.*

The deus ex machina of it all! And the zombie goodness (though the demi-demons aren't really zomibes. They just seem like they ought to be zombies).

And Greg being an angst potatoe kind of annoys me. I spent the whole evening kicking the Greg!muse around trying to get him to stop being an angst potatoe for a bit, but I was informed it was all for the sake of the plot and to live with it.

The character!muses and my Muse are getting a little too uppity for my tastes. Jeez.

[aestusargenteus]

You get demons, I'm jealous! I want demons! Greg is angsty but well, I think it's understandable.

[tastelikeapples]

What, dystopian versions of the future don't include demons? Come on now, that's no fun!

Yes, but he's uppity about it.

[aestusargenteus]

Nope, demons are a little too out there for my world, unfortunately. Though if I get to the end and need words they might be my answer....