The Most Beautiful Thing

[tatia85]

THE MOST BEAUTIFUL THING

This is one-shot fanfic into my ancient Greek/AU!AU. Ennis is a Spartiate, a noble of Sparta, and Jack [Ioan] is a Hilots, kind of a serf. Here Ennis is having a dream…

The poem is of Saffo. Saffo is an ancient Greece poetess. She wrote some of the most beautiful poetry ever, and she wrote them about love between women, so

Comments

[forevermare]

Tatia,

Your imagery is gorgeous. The words you chose gave me such a clear mental image of the scene that I almost felt as if I were standing there listening to the sounds of the water and smelling the flowers.

And Ennis certainly would make a perfect Spartan!

Mary

[tatia85]

tnx!^^ Yeah, I agree on the "Ennis as a Spartan" part =P it is pretty much the reason I started writing, just I feel like it isn't the right time for a story like the one I am writing to be posted... o.o

[max3b1]

Beautifully written and it’s always the right time for J&E.
Good to read something culturally different and I hope you continue to write this…I’m looking forward to it.

[samtyr]

This was very lovely. I hope you decide to write more of this. Thank you for sharing this.

[tatia85]

tnx for spending time to comment my fanfiction^^
Oh, I have written more of this. An introduction, a prologue and the first chapter. I am working on the second one. But it thouchs some sensitive themes... Ancient Greece had a form of pederasty wich was encouraged, between a grow man and a young boy [age between 13 and 15 until 20] to help the youngster to become a proper citizen and, in Sparta, soldier. So I am quite dubious about posting... Mind you, nothing happens at all, but it is talked about in the fanfic itself.

[jackien1968]

I hate to say this when there's been so much journal-locking already, but it might be safest to friends-lock your story. Wouldn't want you to get caught in a morality-police witchhunt. If you already have private entries in your journal and don't want to give everyone access to those, you can make a custom friends list and only give it access to your fanfic. You could friend everyone who asks, if you wish.

Lovely writing. A few language mistakes, but nothing that's hard to understand, and I'm always grateful when someone makes the effort of writing in my native language, my only language. I agree with the person who said how nice it is to see such a unique setting.

Best regards,
Jackie

Beautiful

[greatmtn]

Tatia, a beautiful look at Ennis of Sparta. He would fit right into Spartan culture and always do his duty or die trying.

thanks

greatmtn

[oceansbetween]

I'm entranced by your style. This was lovely. I hope you continue writing!

[my_lil_darlin]

I can tell you have the heart of a poet. You gave us such vivid visual imagery here, I had no trouble picturing the scene and feeling what the characters were going through.

There were places where I could tell you're not a native speaker, but as someone said earlier, it didn't really spoil what you were trying to say.