A Hot Topic {Story Fragment}
"All right then, what do you have here?"
"Ha! You'll like this. Have a look!"
"What, you mean this little pebble here?"
"Precisely! Oop, careful though, under no circumstances do you want to set it off accidentally!"
"Oh? What is it?"
"I call it 'Solid Phlogiston'!"
"Oh come now, the theory of phlogiston was disproven a few years ago ( Read more... )
"Ha! You'll like this. Have a look!"
"What, you mean this little pebble here?"
"Precisely! Oop, careful though, under no circumstances do you want to set it off accidentally!"
"Oh? What is it?"
"I call it 'Solid Phlogiston'!"
"Oh come now, the theory of phlogiston was disproven a few years ago ( Read more... )
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What's the fragment from???
Also the [insert] I'd probably just do a "five minutes later"... or the more funny "fifteen second later"...
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The comment is there as a placeholder if I ever decide to develop on this--and because I'd like to have some of the details of the harrowing adventure to refer back to later if I wanted. "Five minutes later" can work (and is more or less what's there now) but I also think that that particular punchline--since so much was done to set it up ahead of time--could be quite delicious if served cold as well (i.e. if there were more intervening action between the setup and the delivery). I could probably wring an entire chapter out of that exchange, with possibly a bit more at the beginning to set it up (or at least an invitation to drop-by-the-workshop-sometime-there's-something-I-want-to-show-you extended earlier in the story), and use the punchline to close it.
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