Eraser Shavings - A Story in Four Voices (Original!)

[tearlit]

Title:: Eraser Shavings - A Story in Four Voices
Rating: T
Genre: Angst

Pairing: None.
Summary: I stand in the doorway, watching my daughter go through dozens of erasers and I bring her more, knowing that none of it will help.
Note: Written for a contest on The Muse Bunny.
Word Count: 2,102

Comments

[opheliet]

I really, really like this. It's amazing. I love your exploration of the disease the girls have, and especially the different POVs- you did that very, very well here. And the ending was especially haunting but at the same time satisfying. Brilliant! *gives gold star*

[tearlit]

*smiles* I'm so glad you like this! It kinda came out of a nowhere corner in my brain and I went with it. *pins on gold star*

[devotchka_error]

Hey Meggy! Just wanted to tell you how much I liked this. Which is a lot. I liked that you used all of your characters to tell a piece of the story.

On other notes, I hope you're feeling better, and I'm glad you're enjoying The Onion Girl.

~Kelly

[tearlit]

Hey Kel! I'm glad you liked this. *_*

I'm still a human snot factory but otherwise doing well. Are you completely better yet? And The Onion Girl is amazing! *huggles it*

~Meg

[emmadaiou28]

'Tis I, finally making my contest-judging rounds! ^_^

I really like this~! It's like what I was always writing in high school, haunting and insane and abstract, just without the suckage. I could never pull it off this well, though. XP

Am I right to think that the mother (I love how she's always called "the mother" too) killed them? And that she probably killed herself afterward? I rather hope I'm right, because I like the idea of the last action of the story being artfully left out. Kinda like when the last word of a song is never sung, but because of the rhyme and the context you know what it would be, and that one unspoken word haunts your mind because you need to hear it.

*prolly isn't making any sense, and will hush now*

[tearlit]

I'm glad you like this!

Yes, the mother did kill them! I'm glad that came across.

I honestly don't know if she killed herself after or not...I see two different futures for the mother. In future A she does indeed kill herself. In future B someone comes in to find her sitting curled in on herself at the side of the bed, splattered in blood, gun clutched in her hands and the two dead girls still lying there above her. She never recovers.

And you did make sense and I really liked that last bit about the last word of the song not being sung. *_*

Thanks so much for commenting!