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[thadicalradical]

        “Wait a minute,” Frankie said as he pulled another cigarette from his crumpled pack, “Alice don’t have no dog Bill, right

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So Is Bill Surrey, Is He This Bill?

[justinsmith1]

Did you say that you wrote prior Bill n' Frankie pieces, leading up to this moment? If there are, I'd like to take a look at them.

I like that Bill is fingering the bullets in his pocket: it's a vivid image. I also think the dialogue (and dialect) is well done. On the other hand, like I said before, I think the plot is hackneyed.