fic: hey, i heard you were a wild one [exo; krislay; nc-17]

[thatdayismine]

hey, i heard you were a wild one
exo; krislay; nc-17; 2200
wu fan’s always liked a quick blowjob. besides, fundraising galas were boring anyways. pwp.

Comments

[jaerotic]

KREYING KRYSTAL TEARS BECAUSE THIS IS /PERFECT/
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sobs at yixing getting jealous and amitting it while being fucked
ahhhhh this is so perfect this pair needed fic like this pretty badly nav and you delivered.
;-;;;; i love you bb. ty.

[thatdayismine]

cries on you ;A;

i'm just really glad you liked it;;; i have a bigger piece i am working on but idk when i'll finish it. but i love krislay. i have so many feels for them, it's a bit ridiculous;;

i love you too ;______;

♥♥♥

[mywookness]

everything is nc-17 and nohing hurts

[thatdayismine]

;_____; agreed. thankyou for reading! ♥

[tiggie0307]

...I wish I was in that mini van! :D I have no shame in being a peeping tom for these two XD

[thatdayismine]

lmao maybe one day, huh?

thanks for reading! ♥

[delvae]

jay! porn! :DDD
there's nothing against a little bit of good written porn, right? ^^
good stuff, good stuff :)
I bet they both looked pretty sexy in their suits, hmm~
and I liked the sappy ending :) sex with love is always the best.

oh , and I love the titel!

[thatdayismine]

i'm so glad you liked it! sex with love is kinda really nice? idk, i like my kinks but sappiness always makes me really happy lol

thankyou for reading! ♥

[pervertparade]

"sex crazed whore" - this needs to become sex-crazed whore. otherwise there is ambiguity. you could be, like, calling him a whore who is also mentally unstable and somehow also an embodiment of intercourse. THE HYPHEN IS YOUR FRIEND IF IN DOUBT, NAVVLES. USE HER WISELY

[pervertparade]

"“Always so eager,” Wu Fan grins, fingers making little work of Yixing’s belt and the front of his pnats" - (haffwa' doon) pnats, huh. pnats

[thatdayismine]

so maybe i cackled when i read "he scraps nails, huh? he literally turns solid metal nails into scrap? inside someone else's undies? well that is a gift, tbh, nav. and one i fear is being misused."

and " i'm not sure bitterness is the adjective you're looking for, bb. unpleasant? maybe even salty a bit? idk. but not bitter. not unless he's been eating lemons for months."

cackled endlessly.

thankyou for catching the mistakes bb ♥ and thankyou for reading my stuff, even though kpop isn't even your thing. you're too good to me ♥♥♥

[themadpoker]

"He chuckles as he undoes his belt" - third o' the way doon. find a different verb. chuckling is always associated with middle-aged men in my mind and has undertones of seediness D8

See for me chuckling is associated with Edward Cullen because he did it so often in Twilight. Still pretty seedy though.

"He digs a finger between Yixing’s crack, dragging it up as he kneads the muscle of his ass" - i, what? what? nav, i...i am kind of dying. ok. ok. so you can be creative in porn, but KNEADING THE MUSCLE OF HIS ARSE? IT'S LIKE HE'S TRYING TO MAKE BREAD. GOOD GRIEF I AM DYING.

That's AMAZING. :D I was thinking of it as a really weird sort of massage but now I am always going to see the bread imagery. I feel like the sequel should feature sudden onset cannibalism so you can say you were clever and caught the foreshadowing.

"the bitterness of his own come swirling into his mouth" - i'm not sure bitterness is the adjective you're looking for, bb. unpleasant? maybe even salty a bit? idk. but not bitter. not unless he's been eating lemons