Comments | thawrecka: Fic: (Will You Catch Me?), Jin/Yamapi

thawrecka

Fic: (Will You Catch Me?), Jin/Yamapi

Dec 17, 2007 13:47

(Will You Catch Me?)
Jin/Pi, cosplay hijinks+secret voyeurism, just under 700 words
note - I meant to write this two months ago. Whoops! I also intended it to be something rather different initially.

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Comments 18

spurious December 17 2007, 02:52:48 UTC

I REMEMBER TALKING TO YOU ABOUT THIS.

Aw, it's angsty. :( ♥

thawrecka December 17 2007, 02:57:18 UTC

IT WAS MEANT TO BE HAPPY! AND THEN... I don't know what happened. In my head, Jin is just a sad muffin.

spurious December 17 2007, 02:59:18 UTC

a;slkdfj :( it's not bad! just. sadtimes. :(

thawrecka December 17 2007, 03:05:12 UTC

I'm glad it's not bad! GOD, THAT ICON.

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thawrecka December 17 2007, 02:59:38 UTC

I'm happy you like it, my dear. As long as it's a good death, it's okay XD Speling is opshonal.

mananeh December 17 2007, 08:43:03 UTC

Oooh I like *__*

thawrecka December 17 2007, 08:45:16 UTC

Thank you! :D

anamuan December 17 2007, 21:09:15 UTC

"Your dress doesn't match your shoes."
perfect response.

"This," declared Yamapi, opening his shirt, "is grade-A sexy right here."
XD so competitive.

and then voyeur!kame who knows more than pin.

Yamapi's eyes are wide and confused, as if he doesn't understand what he's doing or why, as if he doesn't know why he can't stop himself. Kame wonders what he thought would happen, what game he thought he was playing with Jin. He opens his mouth, as if to say stop, but then Jin pushes his shirt off and he only looks more lost.
this part is just pretty.

and pins Yamapi like a butterfly
as is this. love the simile.

Yamapi still looks wide-eyed and innocent but also a little broken. Like a sea creature dashed against the rocks and put back together all wrong. It's an appealing look on him.

Jin smiles but even now he doesn't look truly happy. The vicious light in his eyes is dim, unsatisfied.

Kame walks away, feeling vindicated.
aww. what a messy tangle you leave us with.
i like it.

thawrecka December 17 2007, 21:49:53 UTC

What awesome feedback! I'm glad you like it!

4_03_am December 31 2007, 04:36:06 UTC

Damn, that was kind of. :(( I. Well, it was good of course, but. :\\

Geez, I should really stay away from fics like this if I want to keep telling myself I no longer dislike Kame.

thawrecka January 4 2008, 04:10:33 UTC

I guess I'll take that as a compliment, hee. Thank you for the feedback.