This one isn't as good as the other ones just because it's TOO ridiculous. Like, you have to at least make me believe it, man. I'm not insulting you here, it's just criticism (constructive?). It's just too hard to belive that you could break bottles and no one come out of the class rooms. If you're gonna write a fantasy or sci-fi story, you can break the rules of logic, but not in (fuckin ridiculous) fiction like you have here. other than that, it was good. I liked the shark one better I think. Maybe. We'll see.
This is completely believable - everything to do with Jon is believable. I'd say that some of the craziest things I've done, I've done with Jon, or were influenced by him, or were his ideas. To be honest, if anyone were to blow up Payton, I'd bet my life he had something to do with it.
Yeah, I definitely don't miss him at all. Good riddance! And the reason I can't see him blowing anything up is that he's too much of a pussy. I really don't think he has the balls for any shit like that.
Yeah, I definitely don't miss him at all. Good riddance! And the reason I can't see him blowing anything up is that he's too much of a pussy. I really don't think he has the balls for any shit like that.
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would your respect for me be raised or lowered if I said I actually miss Jon a lot??
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And no way, because everyone misses Jon.
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-Phil
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This is completely believable - everything to do with Jon is believable.
I'd say that some of the craziest things I've done, I've done with Jon, or
were influenced by him, or were his ideas. To be honest, if anyone were
to blow up Payton, I'd bet my life he had something to do with it.
He needs to come back right now.
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-Phil
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