Yes for more feelings! But you do have a really great knack to say things while describing it rather flatly (this happened, that happened, he said this, she said that, more stuff happened, end), and I actually rather like that minimalistic style sometimes. Middle way! (because me, in the same situation, would be all: this happened, and he thought this and that about he, and what if this and that, and he had a huge mental discussion about it. and then that happened, and it shocked him, and he fearfully thought a, b, and c about it, and then he thought of his friends. and then, he softly said that, in a gentle voice, to the lovely being in front of him. and then she said, putting her soft, white, velvetty, perfectly manicured, lovely arm on his hairy, brown, muscled arm, which made him feel d, e, and f, that blablabla. I swear I'm that long winded.)
it wasn't like that before! :( it was all, lots of description and things happening. it's half my problem with this book, that it's not got the same arty farty flow to it :(
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you better come! :P
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