I like it... based on the mood, it seems you were pretty pleased with it too. :p
I'm getting a bit caught on the fourth line... I can't understand what it means for life to be "burning at the pyre," nor why it would have stopped burning there. The metaphor is more confusing than enlightening.
I really like the second line of the third stanza. I mean, I think I like the rest of it, but I like that line in particular.
And, of course, it's an interesting thought. Whether it's dark or bittersweet is all up to interpretation, I guess. Which is it's own brand of awesome. :p
Now, I'm not much of a poetry buff by any standards, but one of the poets whose works I have enjoyed is Robert Frost. This poem put me very much in mind of 'Fire and Ice.' Yay for that!
I like the repetition of 'It needs' near the end of the piece. It's very strong, very forceful. Kudos to you.
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I'm getting a bit caught on the fourth line... I can't understand what it means for life to be "burning at the pyre," nor why it would have stopped burning there. The metaphor is more confusing than enlightening.
I really like the second line of the third stanza. I mean, I think I like the rest of it, but I like that line in particular.
And, of course, it's an interesting thought. Whether it's dark or bittersweet is all up to interpretation, I guess. Which is it's own brand of awesome. :p
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I like the repetition of 'It needs' near the end of the piece. It's very strong, very forceful. Kudos to you.
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