Fic Commentary: Touching and Time

[the_tenzo]

This is the second installment of the Fic Commentary Meme, where you request 'em and I annotate 'em ( original post here). This one was requested by unfolded73. The original text of this story can be found here.

And just a reminder, this is an Adult story.

Comments

[unfolded73]

This was even better the second time around! And you did an excellent commentary.

"Wait, he did what with his tongue in her mouth? Are me and my husband doing something wrong?"

HAHAyes!!! Sometimes it starts to sound more like my last dental checkup than kissing.

So, I don't know what y'all do, but when I'm starting to work on a smut!fic, I kind of go through my catelogue of sexual positions first and decide how, mechanically, they're going to do it

For me, it's started to become a checklist. Missionary, check. Cowgirl, check. Doggy-style, check. Ok, some of those have more than one check, I'm not gonna spurn good old missionary in favor of ... I don't know, wheelbarrow or something. But yeah, I think hard about positions.

[the_tenzo]

I feel like I may need to get sexual position flash-cards if I'm going to continue writing smut.