Fic Commentary: Dream Sequencing

[the_tenzo]

Moving forward with the fic commentary meme! If you'd like to get in on it as well (which I encourage whole-heartedly--I love writing these things to a shameful degree), here's the original post.

Comments

[fid_gin]

*iz ded*

Lordy, how I love this one. Wonderful commentary, too. I know I constantly catch myself stopping and saying "Good god, did I actually just use the words 'her wetness'?!"

[the_tenzo]

Isn't it weird that even with all the silly commentary these still manage to be really hot?

I think one of the reasons I don't typically use a beta, especially for smut, is I kind of just have to close my eyes and hit "post" before I start to second guess every single word I've written. Because with the porn, it's really easy to just sit there and go "Oh god, really? Really?!"

[jaradel]

Thank you for this! And to anyone reading this who HASN'T read "The One True Free Life", go now and read it!

[the_tenzo]

Thanks for the plug! I'm hard at work on a sequel, just so everyone knows. Well, I'm hard at work plotting a sequel. No writing has occurred yet.

[unfolded73]

I've been working my way through this in bits for most of the evening. Yep. Still hot as hell.

Also ~fans self~ I'm getting massively turned on re-reading this. Is that wrong?

If it's wrong, then I don't wanna be right. It happens to me every time, and it especially happened with The Do-Nothing Day last night. But, you know, my husband was happy with the outcome.

[the_tenzo]

The original was really effin' long and now with the commentary it's like the Pornographic Illiad. But I'm glad people enjoyed it the second time around!

[editrx]

This was just as hot reading it a second time, with the commentary. Damn, it was good.

(Can I snark just a second, though? Prone is face-down. Supine is face-up. I used to edit for Masquerade Press -- yeah, I edited porn for a living for a while. This is the first time I admitted that in public, not like it's not on my resume anyway. :) Want to know how I always remembered it? One of the other editors came up with a memorable ditty: It's divine to make love while supine,// but when prone it's a pain in the ass. [I didn't say it was a good ditty, but most of the porn we were editing wasn't exactly award-winning stuff.])

[the_tenzo]

LOLOLOL! I think somewhere in the back of my mind I did not the difference between prone and supine (many years of yoga) but "supine" sounds so...it sounds like something you do at the Doctor's office (and not the good kind of Doctor either!). I must confess I did always think that prone had a more general meaning as just "laying down" in addition to its antonym relationship to "supine". But that rhyme is hilarious!

[martinsnewteeth]

Tencest FOREVER! That would make a great shirt for Gallifrey this year!

I love that you are the number one google on that!

[the_tenzo]

I think you'd give all the Classic Whovians the vapours with that shirt! Do it!