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Apr 25, 2005 13:53

This Used To Be My Main Style More Of A Repititive Poem Just Thought I Should Give It One Last Try FEEDBACK APPRECIATED ( Read more... )

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DALLAS POET anonymous April 25 2005, 19:24:57 UTC
Thats cool that your playing with many different forms. So you like the beats eh? This one reminds me of Alan Ginsbergs HOwl. I personaly like the direction you are currently taking with inspiration and lonely church. The whole beat repetitive form is good to free your voice so to speak. Maybe you can start out this way when writing and then allow those thoughts to ripple into more linear cohesive stansas as each of these stansas erect into one powerful testament of what you have to say. Your at a point where you can express your social concience in a more disciplined form and youve done that with lonely church.
peace,
ricardo
rgarza@bli.com

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the_valley_poet April 25 2005, 20:13:05 UTC
yes this is how i first started writting but then figured the whole repititive style was just to far simplistic for me so i've been taking time to craft my own style and just writting from differnt points of view such as lonely church but didn't want to get to abstract cuz thought it would take the meanning away from the poem

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DALLAS POET the_valley_poet April 25 2005, 21:08:41 UTC
I hear you. Looks like your learning and working with many forms.From Journey poems to Narrative. Good job. Determining which forms to use is quite simple. If your wanting to write about particular person then you narrate the poem ( Narrative)If its a feeling then you can go as abstract as you want..r

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the_valley_poet April 25 2005, 23:20:45 UTC
Actually i might be doing a narrative one later tonight just haven't had time to polish it up yet. and yes i am working with many differnt forms and styles of writting as well as differnt rhyme schemes. And i am working on getting more abstract with out losing the audience

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