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"Sweet Dreams" (Scabior/Hermione)

Aug 07, 2011 15:54

Author: the_woods_
Title: Sweet Dreams
Pairing: Scabior/Hermione (or rather, Penelope Clearwater)
Prompt: "Sweet Dreams (Are Made Of This)"...specifically, the cover by Emily Browning
Rating: R for sexual assault
Word Count: 1530
Summary: Sometimes, he forgets who is hunting who.
Warnings: Sexual assault, cross-gen
A/N: This was written hastily for elle_blessing based on her ( Read more... )

fanfic, scabior/hermione, comm: rarepair_shorts, hp, fic: sweet dreams, community, scabior, challenge

Comments 21

magic_knickers August 9 2011, 03:18:38 UTC

Ohmigod, that was hot. In a creepy sort of way, but that's sort of the point, yeah? I love your word usage--contradiction and trek and frenzied are all such...meaty choices, I guess, though that still feels like the wrong word. I liked it a lot.:)

the_woods_ August 9 2011, 20:19:12 UTC

Haha ! Definitely the point :) The song inspired me to be creepy !

Thank you for reading, I appreciate it ! Glad someone out there liked it...and I think I know what you mean, I tried echoing the same harsh/thick/desperate feelings by using those words often :)

-n

owlbait August 14 2011, 10:50:49 UTC

Wow, the image Scabior living his world by scent is just ... ~ooh shivers~

the_woods_ August 14 2011, 16:33:36 UTC

I was struggling with whether or not to just make him into a fledgling werewolf. In the end canon won out...but I'm still in love with the idea of him maddened by the smell of Hermione *g*

Thank you for reading !

-n

fiery_flamingo August 15 2011, 05:05:55 UTC

This is a great interpretation of the prompt. I loved the language that you used and the imagery, it's all very visceral and creepy!hot.

the_woods_ August 15 2011, 15:23:11 UTC

Thank you ! I figure I hadn't read enough stories regarding obsession with scent, so this was the time to write one.

-n

thisbitchemma August 18 2011, 02:45:29 UTC

This was...different. A good kind of different. I just feel...confused. Not because of your writing, but because of the emotions I went through reading it. I found it creepy, then hot, then creepy, then more creepy.

I think your mission is accomplished.

the_woods_ August 18 2011, 07:04:59 UTC

Oh, this is the best kind of compliment there is. Glad the story pushed against your limit for creepiness intake :) Thanks for reading !

-n

elle_blessing August 20 2011, 19:39:19 UTC

First, I'm so, so sorry I didn't comment on this earlier! You posted while I was out of town on vacation. I'm here now, though!

This time, the jasmine was subdued by the spices of the earth, of dirt and bark and decaying leaves. Almost violently, he tugged the scarf off the tree, draping it around his neck.

I love the imagery inherent in this bit. I can totally see how her scent would cause an involuntary burst of violence - or how it could provoke a lot of involuntary responses. Her scent alone moves him, though the unpredictability of how or where it will move him is titillating.

He traced her slender neck by sniffing her scarf: its lingering scent whispered a dozen sweet secrets about her body

A lovely, vivid bit of prose.

When he woke, he tried to cling to hazed memories of last night. They brushed away easily, like fragile cobwebs woven around him, destined to dissolve into nothingness.The cobweb metaphor used her was SO PERFECT. *loves ( ... )

the_woods_ August 21 2011, 00:03:25 UTC

Hooray ! Glad you read it and enjoyed your gift. A good welcome back home present, I think :D Thank you for such an inspirational prompt ;)

I mentioned it in the above comments, but I didn't want to go too AU and make Scabior into a werewolf, so it was a challenge figuring out what to balance regarding his scent obsession. I'm glad it worked out okay :)

Thanks again for reading, & for the prompt !!

-n