Well, this is a monolgue thingy about christmas i wrote. Its kinda depressing but also hopeful. Actually, I don't know if this a monologue or not but its seomthign i wrote so here it is
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Nice job! There were some grammatical problems with the useage of the semi colon and i think that some of the words were a little... hmmm... misused, such as galloping... and such... try toning that down a little.. but other than that its a very interesting piece... i like the ending the most... just wondering, is this what christmas is really like in your family, or did just a depressing thought come over you that you wanted to elaborate on... either way. good job. B
Thank you for noticing the semi-colon my computer fixes those all wrong and I probably clicked yes thinking it was a spelling thing. Secondly, although gallop may be a.. how do you say.... eclectic word, i actually did gallop, it was odd, i will explain later so I shall keep it. Finally, this is based on real life experience. This was my view of my christmas this year and the whole ending actually took place which was great. Thank you for the comments and Happy New Year!
Oh bitch... the grammatical problems in this essay automatically gets you like a two... i mean come on! sv; but sv?!?! Psh... and then the gallop just loses you points... fine, i'll revamp to a b+... but that's all you're getting...
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hahaha, that was fun
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... hoe...
... for gardening...
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