Art in Sexuality

May 11, 2005 22:30

(my poetry)(please comment, i need some suggestions ( Read more... )

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elijahxcoldiron May 12 2005, 10:03:34 UTC
just so you know, its 'lose' instead of 'loose' only one 'O'

im sorry if im being a gramatical bitch.
i like the rest of the poem though.

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de_la_queso May 12 2005, 16:28:06 UTC
i want you to fuck me like a blank canvas
hell yeah

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fancypantsies May 12 2005, 18:56:52 UTC
its missing something.
i love the idea
but its missing heart
personality...
SOMETHING i cant identify
<3

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jfkassassinator May 12 2005, 21:14:14 UTC
The poem seems worse when reading the words than when hearing it im sure..

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