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[theladynthevamp]

Hey, guys. I've been writing this story lately and since I really have no where else to post it, I hope you all will read it. It's called "Alternate Universe" and it's about a young woman and her re-occuring nightmares/dreams. It has three chapters so far and I'll probably keep updating three chapters at a time. Even if you don't read it. ;) Ok,

Comments

[fvck]

Laaaaaa! That's exciting! You ended it at a very nice place to keep us all waiting for more. So get going on ittttt!!

There's something I just want to point out:
"There was no television in this room, which made it even more peaceful knowing there is no interrupting while they are in here."
You might want to re-word this sentence, because it kind of doesn't flow with the rest of the story-telling-ness; I think it's because of the word 'is', maybe.

But other than that (and a few understandable grammatical errors), it's soooooo great! The description is just wondermous, I like the way you describe the setting most of all. And the dialogue (especially in the dream) is really well written.

Great job. .. Write more soooooon.

[theladynthevamp]

Whoot dank you and yeah, I agree with you on the tv part. I never really got a good grasp on that sentence. I'll just either take it out or re-word it.