Fan Fiction Attempt

[themarinalegacy]

 So, I've been really into Harry Potter at the moment, with it being the last movie and all. I've always been a huge fan, but I'm just getting really into the fandom and such and I thought I'd post this start to a fan fiction I wrote this week. I thought for a while about what I wanted to write about, as I love a lot of the eras from the books, but

Comments

[julessims]

Lewis, this is so, so, so good so far. Please, continue it! I almost started crying when Andromeda knew before she knew that Dora was gone. Your narrative is great. I could see exactly what you were describing.

The only thing I would suggest, and it's a piddly little thing, is making sure you're using proper punctuation. Basically, full stops, question marks, etc. go inside of the ending quotations (you did it twice, so, like I said, a piddly thing), and there should be a comma between the last word and the quotation mark if it continues with 'he said, she said, etc. Does that make sense?

But really, those are just technical stuff, because this? This is incredible, and it's left me yearning for more. <3

[themarinalegacy]

Thank you! I'm planning to continue it! :D I just need to figure out a few plot details and then I'm going to start Chapter 1, which will hopefully be longer than this one. Ah! I'm so glad you liked it and coming from you, such a talented writer, it makes me so happy! <3

Yeah, I am pretty awful at stuff like punctuation! xD I always thought that it was different in America and the UK, one has the full stop outside the quotation marks and the other has them inside them. IDK, that's what I was told but I might just be making that up! I'll make those changed now though! :)

Thank you so much Jules! ILY! :D <3

[rosanna29]

Lewwiiiiiiiiiiiissssssssssssssss, this is really good! I mean, I haven't really read fanfic before, but it's fantabulous! The ending is super sad but it's so sweet with her and Teddy! And you're actually a really good writer =)

[themarinalegacy]

Ahhh! Thank you, Rosanna! I haven't read a lot before, but some of them are really good! "Actually", it sounds like you doubted me? ;DD

[syddem87]

Awwh Lewis I loved this! Which is weird because I usually *hate* fanfiction. But I like it because you're writing about characters we really know nothing about. It's very well written and I'm excited for more. (:

[themarinalegacy]

Ahwrhefdo! Thank you, Sydney! I never normally like fanfiction either, I only like it if it's about stuff we don't already know as I hate it when people try to contradict what J K wrote. Thank you so much though! I just started writing Chapter 1 today! :D

[sowermywoh]

Great writing! I want you to follow up to this topic!?!