Comments | thepiss_artist: An attempt at free-verse.

thepiss_artist

An attempt at free-verse.

Aug 26, 2009 04:02

I have never viewed myself as a poetry person. It wasn't my "turf", it wasn't my forte, it wasn't my style, and I made it a firm point that I wrote stories, and nothing else (possibly scripts from time to time, but I've never really focused much on that). Lately, however, I've been giving my writing a lot of thought, and, since I've already got ( Read more... )

you don't need to read this, writing and other similar stuff, crap that won't make sense to anyone

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lostinsalvation August 28 2009, 11:24:51 UTC

Ah ... ^ w ^ I love this.

I mean, for your first time at writing a free-verse poem [or, more specifically, for ONE of your first times] this is beautiful. It's so ... idk. Heart-wrenching. BEAUTIFUL.

Yes. That's it. That'll do. That's the best term I can come up with to describe this piece. Beautiful. The tone, the descriptions you came up with ... somehow, I was able to feel how the girl and the persona felt. Pitiful, yet admirable. And ohshit I'm not making sense anymore, am I? No, I suppose not.

But it was extremely well written. It was rhythmical and soothing, yet it bordered enough on the mysterious to make it a tad bit disturbing.

I WOULD LIKE TO MEET PIETRO. =D

Beautiful job, Nny. Beautiful.

thepiss_artist August 28 2009, 13:02:11 UTC

Thank you! AND HUZZAH, PIETRO. KAY OFFICIAL NA MAN ANG NAME~

So he's Italian too? XD Like Benito?

Anyway. Thanks. Again. =] I'm glad that you thought it was good. And that you thought it was a tad bit disturbing. I wish to make more disturbing things. x__x I think I'll make "Litany" a disturbing one too.

And maybe "Mister Week Day's Children".

Dunno how to work with the latter.

BUT YES. THANK YOU.

:]

lostinsalvation August 28 2009, 13:30:21 UTC

You're welcome. =]

But seriously. It's lovely. You should let sir Simpao read it. It's absolutely stunning.

CLITANY!! =D

lostinsalvation August 28 2009, 11:37:37 UTC

thepiss_artist August 28 2009, 13:00:02 UTC

lol.

lostinsalvation August 28 2009, 13:28:37 UTC

VERBAL DIAHRREA!! =D

IS THAT HOW YOU SPELL IT?? O.O

thepiss_artist August 28 2009, 14:37:35 UTC

Mk.

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acidic apple the corn-shucker anonymous September 12 2009, 08:45:38 UTC

I loved him like hot cocoa
on a chilly, winter's day.
I loved him, I loved him.
Alas,
he loved me nay.
he was GAY.

Why, you ask? well, why NOT? :D

oooh~ first time reading this as a whole. LOL.
This is really really good, nini~ It had that whole lovely eerie effect and it made me think.

Purple lipstick. <3

Re: acidic apple the corn-shucker thepiss_artist September 12 2009, 09:40:44 UTC

LMAO WRONG.

WHAT DO YOU MEAN "WHY NOT"??? DDDD8
YOU MAKE ME CRY.

But ahaha. Thanks, Dindi! -hugz- rofl at the fact that it made you think. ~

And corn shucker. The heck.