taking shape, getting better with time

[thetapehiss]

his favorite part of each day was the very first moment, when the flames behind his eyes began to dance. the moment when his dreams stopped moving and laid still, frightened of the dawn about to break over them. thomas' waking mind worked too often like the clocks he spent his days repairing. in his small room over the shop he worked in, he

Comments

[secondspy]

nice use of phrase.
i used yours thrice. check it.

[thetapehiss]

only caught it twice, really only one and a half times. what am i missing?

[secondspy]

i bolded temporarily for you. and you're right, 2 of the times are "half" times--not accidentally.

[thetapehiss]

tricky; i see

[secondspy]

i also want to add that 120 beats per minute is pretty much too many, thomas; get thee to an apothecary, i think you have an overactive thyroid.

[thetapehiss]

thomas got nervous one day, and it just never stopped

[anonymous]

everything comes with time, thomas.

ps, write a book.

[thetapehiss]

it may, and i may

[anonymous]

it does, and you will.

i promise, and you better.

[thetapehiss]

i don't believe promises as much these days.