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THE MINOR DETAILS ; DBSK - Jaejoong/Changmin

Apr 12, 2008 21:10

One good thing that comes out of being sick: some writing.

And here I present you my first try at DBSK fanfiction.

Title: The Minor Details (between you and me)
Author: thevignette
Rating: PG
Fandom: Dong Bang Shin Ki
Pairing: Jaejoong/Changmin
Disclaimer: The boys do not belong to me. This is also nothing but pure fiction.
Warnings: Slash (male/male)

( Cereal in an orange bowl. )

jaejoong/changmin, fic: dbsk

Comments 22

misskiasu April 12 2008, 14:00:30 UTC

Wow! Cute fanfic hehe. I like the way they fight, very amusing!

thevignette April 12 2008, 14:34:57 UTC

Thank you! :D

jaemint April 12 2008, 16:12:45 UTC

Awww, this is so so so so cute. ♥ *gets all fluffy*

thevignette April 13 2008, 01:46:24 UTC

Thank you for reading :D

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thevignette April 13 2008, 01:46:40 UTC

I'm so glad you liked it!

miyun April 12 2008, 22:31:03 UTC

Gorgeous and very nice flow. I love the moments and intimacy of them.

The only thing I'd like to point out though is since you didn't say whose POV it was...it took me awhile to figure out who was talking. Up until you mentioned Jaejoong's blond hair. Maybe mention that it was Changmin talking in the beginning somehow? So that the reader can concentrate on the story more as opposed to trying to figure out who's voice they were reading.

Much enjoyed!

thevignette April 13 2008, 01:48:42 UTC

Thank you :D

Ah, I really wanted to try writing something without working their names into it, so I was desperately dropping hints throughout about who was who (the blond hair, their ages, etc.) but thinking back, I should have put those hints right at the start.

Thank you so much for reading and the lovely comment.

miyun April 13 2008, 02:50:31 UTC

You're welcome! Will definitely look for more stuff by you. ^^

kurogoma April 13 2008, 12:06:10 UTC

i need to do something about my burgeoning flist, it almost buried this little gem.

i love this. alot.
i love how they can go from fighting like vicious kitties one minute, to holding hands at a hair salon the next.
i love that they treasure the little intimate moments when others may be distracted by the obvious bigger things.
i love that it could be the pov of any of them actually, until you revealed jae's blond hair.
oh and i love yunho's cameo.

so, yeah, ♥____________♥.

thevignette April 13 2008, 12:26:22 UTC

Thank you so much :D I love that you enjoyed this.