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Brigit's Flame February entry #1: Weirdlings

Feb 07, 2010 13:04

Brigits Flame February 2010 Entry #1

Prompt: Birds of a Feather

Genre: Fantasy

Word Count: 855

Teaser: Two young girls with a mysterious legacy forge a magnetic, ill-fated connection.

( In town called Verden, there exist those who were touched by ancient powers . . . )

Comments 9

rephen February 8 2010, 04:56:59 UTC

Aaah! Magical. Strange world, and very interesting premise and characters. I enjoyed reading this, it felt like an introduction to something bigger, something exciting. Nice work!

thewindforest February 9 2010, 23:05:50 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you could tell that it is part of a larger work, and very happy that you enjoyed it :D

ailada February 9 2010, 04:44:27 UTC

You have a fantastic way of describing things. Really awesome piece. I can't wait for next week's entry!

thewindforest February 9 2010, 23:07:34 UTC

Thanks lots! I'm glad I was able to paint the scene for you, and that you are looking forward to next week. I will definitely be continuing Mari and Adelle's story, even if in the Just for Fun category :D

katden February 9 2010, 15:55:22 UTC

WOW!
There is so much movement and imagery here! Absolutely stunning.
Hello to you and welcome to the FLAME :D
(can't wait to read next week!)

thewindforest February 9 2010, 23:18:14 UTC

Thank you for the welcome, and I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it! I'm also happy that people are looking forward to next week, and will definitely be continuing Mari and Adelle's story even if it is Just for Fun :D

sue_bridehead February 9 2010, 17:12:20 UTC

That was a very enjoyable story. I loved these lines:

Unlike Ash, she could never seem to catch the pulse of the group, work it or make her place in it. She was the wind, always just passing through.

And that they are 'weirdlings'. Cool!

thewindforest February 9 2010, 23:30:54 UTC

I'm happy you enjoyed those lines, as I was working hard to establish a distinction between Ashton and Maristat without it seeming forced. In the larger body of stories, the Corvines work in tandem a lot; so I want to give each triplet some individuality early on. Thank you for your insights :D

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Re: ROAR thewindforest February 14 2010, 18:59:29 UTC

Thank you very much. I'm glad that you enjoyed the style and tone. I was very much going for an unhurried, pastoral feel to match the setting, so I'm happy that came across :D