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thirdonebetween

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Apr 19, 2006 21:13

refracting
sungmin-centric.
pg-13; 1,967 words.

( You can't paint sunlight, you can only paint what it does with shadows on a wall. )

super junior

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gimmick_ April 20 2006, 02:52:19 UTC

I really wish you'd write more. ;~; This was just really really lovely. I loved it.

thirdonebetween April 20 2006, 03:59:18 UTC

but I'm so lazy. :D;;;

glad you liked it. ♥

booshoo April 20 2006, 03:42:21 UTC

跟我说: Love, Love, Love ♥

you already have extended commentary on everything i love and LOVELOVELOVE and lovebutcryover, so. ♥ 8DV

thirdonebetween April 20 2006, 03:59:42 UTC

XD XD XD dorkface. ♥

I still love your comments. XD

booshoo April 20 2006, 04:00:22 UTC

♥

scylladakylla April 20 2006, 04:55:18 UTC

That was so, so heartbreakingly poignant. I was so completely blown away and was moved to tears. You wrote Sungmin's character so, so well, much better than I ever could, and I love you for it.

I would comment on every line I loved, but that would basically be the entire fic. But random things worth noting:

The Hyukjae and Junsu friendship was really well done, and saddening, because I do believe the thing about TVXQ IS true.
Sungmin thinks for too long about maybe kissing him back, so Kim Heechul arrives and draws Donghae to him like a magnet (or maybe like a moth to flame); Sungmin decides to climb into Youngoon's lap instead, and he gets three more kisses that night.
I loved this line.
It's not I love you, it's I wish you loved me.
My heart broke for Jungsu, over and over again. And for Min, too.
The last paragraph was perfect.

I agree with taylormercury, the pairings didn't matter at all, it was the emotions that you wrote into the characters that did.

bunnie_writes April 20 2006, 04:58:36 UTC

I love the way it's written. It has a lot of feelings, you did very good T_T; I want another. XD;; do a different person's angle! ♥

thirdonebetween April 20 2006, 05:15:33 UTC

aww, thank you. ♥ I'm a really lazy writer, but maybe I'll expand on the other boys sometime. XD they're fun to write.

bunnie_writes April 20 2006, 05:35:31 UTC

I'm lazy myself ;D... but I think it'd be interesting! You could even have parts from other storys bleed into each other so the readers feel the connection, but yet they'd be stable enough that you could just read one and it'd still feel complete.

what? I'm rambling :D Really though ^_^ I loved this a lot ♥

hyperballad April 20 2006, 05:10:43 UTC

I think my heart just broke a few times. This piece is absolutely brilliant and if you love us, you'll write more. ♥

thirdonebetween April 20 2006, 05:16:57 UTC

*glues it back together?* :]?

thank you. ♥ I'm really glad you liked it. as for more, I'm really lazy, but um. maybe I will sometime. XD