Comments | threedee: Blame André if you don't like this, but credit me if you do :)

threedee

Blame André if you don't like this, but credit me if you do :)

Oct 22, 2005 15:15

( The names are subject to change. Yes, I am (now) aware that Sarah Connor was a character in The Terminator. :( Bah I say. Hoping to expand this. )

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tacomeow October 22 2005, 20:27:02 UTC

lol interesting....whats this for?

threedee October 22 2005, 20:28:29 UTC

For reading... :) But it also doubles nicely as something to hand in for my third-person narration assignment.

tacomeow October 22 2005, 20:50:32 UTC

hehehe....its a very nice depiction of how jealousy moves one to act in volence...even/especially children

atomicduck October 22 2005, 21:57:59 UTC

there is more, right? :D
I like your style, things are nicely tense.

the only things I have quibbles with are Henry's dates. like his walking. is 1 year kind of early?

threedee October 22 2005, 22:08:26 UTC

Thankee. I actually did research. Parents.com says "most pediatricians don't consider a child to be a late walker until he's 15 months old." Then again it is a website. But I wanted Henry to have been an early walker.

threedee October 22 2005, 22:15:21 UTC

However I just realised that Henry is about the age where "DOO ANDIG!" might be his first words. Wouldn't that be delicious...

atomicduck October 22 2005, 22:28:04 UTC

hahahaha! and ridiculously disappointing to the parent.

it's just because I remember my various baby acquaintances and little cousin. she was walking at ~18 months but it wasn't very coordinated. mostly zooming around and teetering around precariously, lmao.

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ka_leido_scope October 24 2005, 02:06:00 UTC

I want more!! Or is this one of those stories like the ones in that book you had for class where nothing much resolves but there is some sort of greater purpose? Will you write ME an ending then? If not, I did very much enjoy this as is... interesting commentary on a bratty kid's perspective. Did you ever try to shake me out of my (your) stroller?

threedee October 24 2005, 03:22:02 UTC

Not that I remember, but I think I was crueller than you remember and nicer than I remember. Thing about this story is, they're both kind of brats.

You and Weija don't seem to have noticed that I said "hoping to expand this". :)

P.S. I deleted your duplicate post -- don't be scared :)