~gorgeous green eyes smiling~

Jun 20, 2005 18:37


ooooookay . . . . . . .

after a wonderful battle with writer's block, enjoy:

chapter 4 of checkmarks.

<3

~anni~

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scriblysonstage June 21 2005, 04:23:27 UTC
I loved Jessi being a klutz and freaking out over everything! I'm really getting attached to her character, and as characters are so important to me when reading a story, that's definitely something. She's REAL, you know? She's a real school kid. And I loved what Posie said about Mayer - that was exactly what I was thinking, how he could have been freaking out and not thinking straight. I was glad she was supportive - I don't know, I got the feeling Jessi was overreacting a bit, and it was nice to see Posie could be so supportive. I sort of wish she had talked to Mayer, at least for a minute - but I suppose that confrontation will come. And another good choice with the essay question - now she's in an awkward situation and wants to leave. I think the only way she'll sort out her feelings/figure out what happened is to stay and talk, though...

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thursdayfades16 June 21 2005, 18:37:31 UTC
yea.... that's what i was going for.... all the things you said about establishing her as a real character. i think joey in grains freaked out too much for no apparent reason. so i want jess to freak out a little more logically. if that makes any sense. maybe not quite so often, but often enough that it's real.

like i said, i had really bad writer's block. at a million times i just wanted to stop writing, but i made myself keep going. the beginning sounds really forced, at least to me, but i think (hope) it gets better by the end.

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