You are absolutely horrible. For once, just once, could you post a chapter of Checkmarks without saying something about how it isn't the best, or you did it really quickly so it isn't that good? Okay, I'm finally seeing the significance (or some of the significance) of the title. I was wondering where it came from, but now I feel less clueless. So Jessi's life is in checkmarks and the lack of checkmarks. Interesting. Painting seems to be her way of releasing emotion, so the picture she does of herself and Mayer only makes sense. It's interesting that the stairs were scraped off and now they're "trapped"...foreshadow? I see how Jessi maybe considers herself trapped, so being trapped with Mayer could turn out to be a good thing or a bad thing, depending on how they're trapped. If that makes sense. I loved the bit about perfection. That does so much for Jessi's character, those few short paragraphs. She's dealing with someone seeking perfection, but she believes perfection lies in a person's flaws. How can she get along with her father
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okay, i know i always always say that, but i meant it especially with this chapter. for some reason it was really hard for me to write. some sections of it i've had done for weeks, others got thrown in today. so i think that's why i have quite a few grammatical errors, which i will go and fix... some parts i even combined sentences and all that.
but you really seem to get exactly what i want out of the story... and i figured i would wait awhile to introduce the checkmarks thing so it didn't seem so obvious. i hope that was okay.
thanks, as always for the comments! yours always rock!
I'm glad I'm picking up on things...it makes me feel better as a reader/critique-y person. ^_^ And yes - introducing the checkmarks system a little into the story makes perfect sense. Of course it's "okay" - it makes sense where you put it in, and it didn't need to be explained at any point before that. Anyway...you're perfectly welcome for the comments. I enjoy reading it, really, and if I have to slow down reading anything I have time to think, and wonder about what will happen...so with yours I have to wonder, and that's where the comments come from. I just hope I'm being helpful, and I'm glad they "rock". ^_^
noooooooooo i had a whole comment, and now i think it's gone. fine then. i'll try to re-type it. stupid computer. next i'm going to find out it really didn't delete it, and i typed all this for nothing. okay here goes. again
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both won't be finished for awhile. grains because i want to finish checkmarks first. and i'm gonna try to make checkmarks over 50,000 words. and checkmarks because... well, i can't just churn out 50,000 words that easily.
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Okay, I'm finally seeing the significance (or some of the significance) of the title. I was wondering where it came from, but now I feel less clueless. So Jessi's life is in checkmarks and the lack of checkmarks. Interesting.
Painting seems to be her way of releasing emotion, so the picture she does of herself and Mayer only makes sense. It's interesting that the stairs were scraped off and now they're "trapped"...foreshadow? I see how Jessi maybe considers herself trapped, so being trapped with Mayer could turn out to be a good thing or a bad thing, depending on how they're trapped. If that makes sense.
I loved the bit about perfection. That does so much for Jessi's character, those few short paragraphs. She's dealing with someone seeking perfection, but she believes perfection lies in a person's flaws. How can she get along with her father ( ... )
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but you really seem to get exactly what i want out of the story... and i figured i would wait awhile to introduce the checkmarks thing so it didn't seem so obvious. i hope that was okay.
thanks, as always for the comments! yours always rock!
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That will be soon. Right? RIGHT? Yes. Finish it. Work away slave to literature.
You WILL finish it 'cause I wanna read it.
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both won't be finished for awhile. grains because i want to finish checkmarks first. and i'm gonna try to make checkmarks over 50,000 words. and checkmarks because... well, i can't just churn out 50,000 words that easily.
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And if you put in a whole page of "Crazy I was crazy" that'll generate a ton of words, but I don't think it'll add much to your storyline.... o.o
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how about this?
i'm done with checkmarks.
not really, but go read it anyway.
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