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[Fanfic] JUMP-ING and (SH)OUT!

Jan 20, 2009 23:29

Title: JUMP-ING and (SH)OUT!
Author: Tieres (a.k.a ME)
Characters: Yamada Ryosuke (and the rest of JUMP)
Pairing: NONE
Genre: comedy
Disclaimer: I don't own them T_T (and if you want to understand the "dream in the dream" moments you should watch this HSJ dream talk: newshfan )
Rating: PG
Words: 929
Summary: Yamada’s one day of the JUMP-ING tour and a ( Read more... )

english version, fanfic: comedy, yamada ryosuke, hey!say!jump

Comments 4

mint_chocolate5 January 21 2009, 00:11:47 UTC

Um... you spelled Strange wrong, you wrote Srange

They were about the starting in a moment. That sentence doesn't make sense it should be They were about to start in a moment.

Ryosuke looked up at Dai-chan for a moment and his chin fall down. Instead of fall down, it's fell down.

He sat on the armchair and acted all mysterious and manly as he could menage. It's manage not menage.

I was sitting on an armchair and there was a dead animal in my shoulders. It's on not in.

Sorry for correcting you so many times!

This one-shot is really good. Ahaa his future is his nightmare

tieres January 21 2009, 00:29:36 UTC

Oh, thank you so much for correcting! (It would be good if these were my only mistakes... XD)
And thanks for reading it!

suteii January 22 2009, 03:55:27 UTC

poor Yama-chan, poor poor Yama-chan.... um sedative herbs that grow in the meadow!? Is that really what I think it is? Bad Takaki.

tieres January 22 2009, 05:35:56 UTC

o.O" erhm... Maybe I used the wrong word... Those herbs are just supposed to calm him down... in my dictionary "sedative" was the first word for the adjective what I searched for o.O" *hides away*
I'm sorry if I was confusing...
(I intend to improve my English by writing fics... beware of me muhahaha)

Anyway thanks for reading it AND for your comment!