Brigit's Flame Week 2 - The Purple Heart

[tigerlilly33]

Title: The Purple Heart
Rating: PG
Warnings: None
Word Count: 2000
Prompt: Mature
A/N: I didn't have the chance to write something at the beginning of the month, so this is Just For Fun. I actually had a pretty quiet day at work on Monday thanks to the Easter holiday, so I got most of this done then. It was actually inspired by a writing prompt for

Comments

[keppiehed]

I always get lost in your writing. There's something jarring about coming to the the end and having run out of words. I mean, I know it isn't going to go on forever, but you have the talent to make me forget everything except what I'm reading, so I am always startled when it's just ... done like that! This makes me want to settle in and read your first novel!

[tigerlilly33]

Keppie dear, I've been a bit hesitant to deal with this story after the whole "End of BF" announcement this week. I really don't know how you are taking it. I am planning on sending you a lengthy email this weekend once I have some more time. I'm really so busy these days that I just haven't had a chance to process the whole thing. I really want to hear from you about it.

As for the story, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I wrote it in bits and pieces and got interrupted a lot as I went along. I don't usually do it that way, so I wasn't sure how it was going to turn out.

I'm not sure you would want to read my first novel. Maybe my first GOOD novel. At this point I know there is a difference! But I'm hoping the latter will be on the horizon soon. I just need to sit down and start writing again.

[keppiehed]

I hadn't been to the site to leave a comment. I was sort of stunned and I didn't want to say anything until I had time to process it.

I wrote a letter this week that sort of sums up my feelings about the whole thing, but I feel heartbroken about it, of course, to say the least. :(

I know you've been busy, but I do miss our talks. I would be so honored to read your novel. I know that you have the talent to go far, it's just a matter of when you are ready to let it happen. I would love to be a help in whatever part of that process I can be, even if you need a daily cheerleader. You hear that? That's how much I believe in you!

[tigerlilly33]

That's how much I believe in you too!!!!!! You are simply the best writer out there and I feel as if the world is just waiting for you. I'm incredibly sincere right now. And I miss our chats so much. I'm glad that I'm only busy at the moment and not so down in the dumps, but it has taken a lot out of me. I hate not having my usual routine and the ability to stay in touch with all you important people.

I read your letter. I'm still trying to process it. Lots of tears. I need to send you a proper email. I'm just hoping that this isn't the end of our working relationship (in whatever form it will become). I don't think I could handle that. Of course, you and I are kindred spirits and I know that our friendship will go on regardless *big-fat-hug*

roar he says quietly

[bardiphouka]

I agree with Keppie. I would love to read something of more length than this. Very drownable, in a good way.

Re: roar he says quietly

[tigerlilly33]

Thanks Bardi! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I do have a tendency to be long-winded in my writing so I'm sure I could write more. I'm always trying to keep my word count down for these competitions though so people will actually read my stories :)

[openedlocket]

Hey, I'm your editor for this week. I love the subtle way you transitioned Chase's initial rebellious and closed off nature into someone deeper and more open. The story carried me along without me even realizing it.

I found hardly anything to edit. All I have to suggest is the spacing between a couple of paragraphs, such as this one:

...He absentmindedly rubbed his eyes.
“Thanks,” he said. “Thanks for telling me the truth. No one else ever did.”

And that's really all I could edit. //hides in shame// Sorry I couldn't really find anything more to change. This was amazing and it's awesome just the way it is :)

[tigerlilly33]

Thanks openedlocket! I'm not sure what happened with the spacing there. I'm going to blame it on LJ formatting because that makes me feel better about myself :P

I'm really glad that you enjoyed this story. I wasn't really sure where I was going to go with it when I started, but I think it turned out nicely. Thanks again for the encouragement. It really helps!

[openedlocket]

Ah LJ. It seems to dislike us all :))

No problem. You deserve all the wonderful encouragement.I can't wait to see your other entries in the future :)

[lacombe]

:-) My wife and I like this one! It's a great setting for a dialog -- the boat, truck, and house do wonders to build up the conversation they're already having and to flesh everything out in a very vivid way. This is very well constructed.

One tiny pet peeve -- you might want to brush up on your hyphen usage. "Ear-buds" should be "Ear buds", and "pick-up" is "pickup". Other than that, this is lovely!

[tigerlilly33]

Wow, you don't expect people to actually read these months after you posted them! Thank you so much for the comments. I'm really glad you enjoyed this one as it it one of my personal favorites.

And I am completely aware of the hyphen problem. I'm actually taking a grammar refresher course at the moment. I just can't help making up rules as I go it seems.

Thanks again for reading!

[lacombe]

You're very welcome! It was a pleasure.