Fic: And in my heart... a desert

[tikra]

Title: And in my heart... a desert
Author: tikra
Beta: darkcuriosity Thanks a lot my dear!
Pairing: Pinto
Word Count: 7.569
Rating: PG
Warning: angst
Prompt: A kiss in the rain
A/N: Written for pintofest
A/N #2: Special thanks to melonbutterfly & rainbowstrlght for inspiring and pushing me when I got stuck

Comments

[aliassmith]

You managed to turn a seemingly simple prompt into a damn near masterpiece. You wrote the angst tempered with sweeteness beautifully-- the description of their first kiss was so evocative-- just the drunkeness and Chris' inner monologue-- it all felt so real. This paragraph I loved:
...every raindrop turned into tiny question marks that kept falling on both their heads, down to their feet were they continued dancing and floating around them, contributing picturesquely to the pool of questions he was trying not to drown in...
Thanks for the gorgeous words!

[tikra]

AWPR§$§$%=%$&§VKV=§$! O_O Wow.

masterpi-..... *gulp* girl, you're using big words here. I guess I cannot thank you enough for that! ;0; I'm more than delighted that you could feel the authenticity, because I wanted it to be that real since, to be honest, not every kiss is filled with pleasure and emotion. Or leads to a revelation.

(aww~ interesting that you loved this paragraph, it's one of my favs too. So yeah, again, thank you so much for commenting bb! <3)

[eaglevision]

X'D Grad zwar keine Zeit zum Lesen, aber ich musste loln wegen des Titels weil: http://mlang.deviantart.com/art/Und-in-meinem-Herzen-74096991
*rofl ö-ö

[tikra]

.... I KNOW THAT PIC & I ABSOLUTELY ADORE IT. That's why I chose it for the title, it inspired me and fitted the content of story perfectly :) OH MEINE MUSE *smooch

[tikra]

Aww~~ who doesn't love kissing? It's the best thing in the world! :D
Thank you so much for the lovely comment!

[rainbowstrlght]

Eeeeee, a kiss in the rain! ♥ I don't care what Chris says, I found it romantic (and I've been in that bone-chilled situation before; just sans-handsome men).

I just love the idea that Chris is wandering this barren landscape of uncertainty, and yet in a single kiss he finds his answer - and it's the type of answer a person can't even really articulate, but suddenly puts everything into perspective; inexplicably into perspective. It's wonderful. So, so wonderful. And then Zach kisses him back... ♥ Sigh.

This was really beautiful, all of it. I'm a big fan of conveying sensory images and impressions, and you had so many of them. This will probably sound weird, but I liked the part where Chris went out for a smoke with the blanket around his shoulders. I was really enraptured from that point on. Just the impression of the wind, and all of that... really, really haunting and striking.

Anyway, I adore it the more I think on it. Thanks for writing and sharing. ♥

(PS: Does that bar really exist?)

[tikra]

I'm proper jealous. But yeah, I think it can be romantic :) preferably in summer? xD when it's more like a soft drizzle that caresses your skin?

*sigh* this was important to me, that sometimes you really just CANNOT put certain things into words, so you're more or less forced to express your feelings otherwise.

Girl, you make me blush ;_;# you do! I'm usually not that confident in using a lot of imagery, so I'm more than glad that it's seemed to work here!
And the balcony scene,~ hnn... though it appears to be trivial, I enjoyed writing that part. I love slipping mundane scenes like that into a fic because I think they are essential to the overall feeling of a fic.

So thank you thank you thank you very much for reading it & leaving such a lovely comment!

(I'm a sucker for verisimilitude, so yes, that tavern really does exist :3 )

[kianspo]

Aw, this was so beautiful! You weave words with mastery so rare and uncanny it actually makes the imagery tangible. Amazing work here. And the flow so perfect and smooth and just wonderful. <3

Incredible characterization. Instant favorite.
<333

[tikra]

wow... eh... *blush
Thank you very much for this incredibly nice comment! Glad you liked it <3