Comments | tinkerbell99: Lost Fic - Nevermore - Desmond

tinkerbell99

Lost Fic - Nevermore - Desmond - PG

Oct 28, 2007 11:43

Title: Nevermore
Author: tinkerbell99
Rating: PG
Character: Desmond
Disclaimer: These characters are not mine.
Summary: He checks the seals; he counts the guns. He listens. He waits. (Was that a sound far above?)

Notes: Written for the Lost Horror Stories challenge at lostsquee. I chose Poe's "The Raven." Excerpts here are from his work.

( Once upon a midnight dreary... )

fic, lost, desmond

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tinkerbell99 October 29 2007, 22:12:00 UTC

Aww, thanks :-) I'm glad it worked for you. The section you quoted *points up* was one of those things that just jumped out at me right away.

Our fics do compliment each other. Desmond and Penny are very, very Poe. I think Des is definitely a Poe fan ;-)

crickets October 31 2007, 03:42:00 UTC

Oh wow. This is just, I love you!

tinkerbell99 October 31 2007, 18:04:34 UTC

Why thank you! *hugs*

halfdutch October 31 2007, 05:09:53 UTC

Oh, this is such a perfect fit for mad Desmond, sealed alone in the hatch. Excellent adaptation!

tinkerbell99 October 31 2007, 18:05:14 UTC

Poe and Desmond go together quite well in a lot of situations, or so I'm learning from this. Thanks for reading!

fosfomifira October 31 2007, 08:17:27 UTC

Oh, I love Poe and I adore what you did with The Raven here. The pacing of the fic, the rhythm of the story work so well with the structure of the poem. You can feel Desmond losing his mind in the Hatch and it's such a cruel twist of fate that the raven should visit him when freedom is at hand. I think Edgar Allan would approve :)

Love it!

tinkerbell99 October 31 2007, 18:06:19 UTC

Thank you! Most of the credit goes to Poe himself, I suppose. I had great material to work with - very Desmondish :-)

Thanks for reading!

zelda_zee November 2 2007, 21:10:32 UTC

This is such a wonderful use of the prompt. Poe and Desmond really are made for each other, and I never would have realized that before reading this and pacejunkie's fic! The madness and paranoia and claustrophobia all suit Poe so beautifully, and having that interpreted in an excellently written piece like this just makes it all the more evident.

What I particularly love is the rhythm of the language of this fic. I know it's not written as a poem, and yet it has a poetic cadence to it. The parts of the original that you quote only add to this impression.

I really loved this.

tinkerbell99 November 2 2007, 21:33:16 UTC

Thank you for your lovely feedback! (And for being the host of all this to start with - what a wonderful idea!)

When I read the list of prompts, this was the one that really jumped out at me. Desmond's experience in the hatch really closely mirrors the way Poe writes. As you said, the paranoia in such a situation suits him very well.

Thanks for reading :-)