Comments | tinmiss1939: City of Shadowy Places, BBC Sherlock Fic

tinmiss1939

City of Shadowy Places, BBC Sherlock Fic

Jan 30, 2012 19:06

Title: City of Shadowy Places
Rating/Warning: PG, none, but spoilers for Reichenbach
Characters/Genre: Lestrade-centric, Gen AU
Word count: roughly 1100 words
Prompt: From morganstuart's Monday request, "You know Moriarty's fairytale about "Sir Boast-A-Lot" that casts Lestrade as King Arthur? I'd love to see a story that runs with that Lestrade-as-Arthur theme ( Read more... )

lestrade, camelot au, bbc sherlock, fic

Comments 8

morganstuart January 31 2012, 01:59:49 UTC

Oh. Oh. This is so clever and so very, very poignant. I got shivers at the way you incorporated Tennyson and folded this into the events of the episode. It's stirring and moving, too, the note of loyalty and strength on which you end this piece, as Lestrade vows that this "isn't done yet."

The way you describe how the two landscapes/realities seem to blur together is really atmospheric.

My heart breaks a bit at how incredibly accurate the "My house hath been my doom" bit is...

Oh, thank you for this. It's inspired and beautiful, and I love what it says about Lestrade. *hugs you and this story*

tinmiss1939 January 31 2012, 16:08:53 UTC

You're so welcome. It was a great prompt and I am glad I could do it some justice. My goals were the atmosphere and Lestrade's character. The Tennyson came so naturally after I started looking; I'd never read him before! Thanks so much for the feedback.

Out of curiosity, are there any other crits or suggestions? I love your writing ( especially the Shadow Boys). If there is anything here that needs some work--Dimmock isn't quite cooperating the way I want--I am so open to hear it.

Thanks again. I had so much fun writing it!

morganstuart February 5 2012, 21:11:36 UTC

To be honest, I'm not the best one for con-crit, but honestly, I just loved this. Another point: I really appreciated how this conveyed the rambling nature of his stream of consciousness, following his thoughts as they wandered.

Here's a great example: "There’s little to distract him here but the eerie weather, mist and a soft wind that makes his coat flutter at his calves. The heavy wool refuses to settle around him. Sherlock’s coat would be very impressive in this weather, flapping about like a great cape and looking downright otherworldly amid the torchlight and stone parapets-"

Perfect! I could see clearly how his thoughts made the leap from one point to another... so beautifully (and convincingly) conveyed!

tinmiss1939 February 7 2012, 14:47:46 UTC

To be honest I'm not the best for con-crit...

If that is the case I'm just going take the complements and run! Thanks :)

thesmallhobbit January 31 2012, 08:45:41 UTC

This is lovely. I like the atmosphere and how the mist seems to swirl around and Lestrade sees things from the corner of his eye. The final verse is great, "And one last act of kinghood shalt thou see", battered but not defeated, there's more to come.

tinmiss1939 January 31 2012, 16:15:25 UTC

Thank you for the feedback. In the episode we never see Lestrade after the arrest/escape and he does look lost and battered there; I'd like to think he could pick himself up and fight back with a little push.

mariole February 4 2012, 01:29:06 UTC

> He’ll prove it, we’ll help, quietly, and everyone else will look like prats.

Oh, hooray. The thing is, the cleverest people will know it's a setup. I like that intelligence coming through. Nice, eerie mood you set. Cheers.

tinmiss1939 February 7 2012, 14:56:05 UTC

That line came from a rewatch of TBB, at the end when Dimmock says "I go where you point me.". There have to be smart people in NSY--maybe a step removed from this case--who can see what is happening. In my head canon, Sherlock and John aren't nearly as alone as they think.

Thank you for the comment! I'm glad it worked for you. Eerie mood was def the goal. Ta!