Comments | tinmiss1939: Alphas Fic: Ciphertext (fragment)

tinmiss1939

Alphas Fic: Ciphertext (fragment)

Aug 14, 2011 18:27

Title: Ciphertext
Characters/Pairing: Rachel, Gary
Genre: Romance OMG
Word count: ~600
Rating: PG-13

Summary: In which Gary has just (somehow) confessed he has feelings for Rachel, and now she responds. Then, some other stuff happens. A fragment of a potential chapter for my Antiphony series, published because I kind of got Jossed and I don't know ( Read more... )

blah blah blah, alphas, antiphony fic series, vanity, questionable decisions

Comments 7

moonvoice August 16 2011, 01:40:41 UTC

This is very cool, and I like how you wrote both Gary and Rachel and the tenderness between them, and how she asked him permission before touching him. Rachel's 'downside' to her power is quite a downside! Be interesting to see how that plays out in the show, but made me so sad for her here!

tinmiss1939 August 17 2011, 23:29:23 UTC

Thanks for the comments; its nice to know it reads the way I wanted. As for Rachel's downside...I think that is something she could learn to manage, especially if she was involved with someone who could understand that she has tolerance limits (perhaps a guy who has personal experience with viewing the world in a unique, difficult manner, hint hint hint).

primus_sile August 16 2011, 07:06:10 UTC

It's really great, a very believable and convincing piece. Thank you for sharing it with us!

tinmiss1939 August 17 2011, 23:30:03 UTC

Yay! Success. Thanks!

lt_sp August 19 2011, 04:45:49 UTC

Awww! Poor Rachel! Poor Gary! My heart is broken! Just broken! :*(

obisgirl August 19 2011, 21:40:08 UTC

Poor Gary. He kisses her, and she passes out, overwhelmed by her senses. I hope if this happens in the show, Rachel, doesn't let her ability overtake her.

How I feel about Gary and Rachel lalaland589 August 26 2011, 08:08:51 UTC

I really love these two! IM GOING DOWN WITH THIS SHIP! :) from the first time i saw them i could see the love story coming together. The way they both are romantically awkward and have parents who see them as children just had me immediately connecting the 2. I love the kissing scene.The dialogue was very "them". and it was very realistic and loyal to the show. but anyway i feel the writers need to be aware of the potential of these two before its too late!no one took there chances at Comic con so I say we go for email? ugh sorry im overreacting but I cant just base the romance parts on cameron since the thing they have the most in common is that theyre both hot. haha(not that theres anything wrong with them together cause theres not) Anyway thankyou for the great post looking forward to the next one soon :)