It's not almost a drabble, it is a proper drabble. Sad how 'they' becomes 'he', how the hardship of slipping an crawling suddenly becomes a beautiful yet terrible view from the top and how the only friendly soul quietly lags behind. And how at the moment of climax/victory, the one on top is always alone....
Well it's more than a 100 words, but I didn't feel like spending hours on tweaking... Thanks for the clearsighted comment, this is precisely what I was trying to say. Though you open up more levels of interpretation: "the moment of climax" and "the one on top" indeed! Rofl. %%% Didn't post it at the time btw because of something you said about Sam, but really this isn't allegory - rather, like Tolkien, applicability, and to more than one person.
Rofl, of course you didn't intend it. It comes subconsciously to you *ducks* About Sam, that was after you'd written "Lethargy" and I'd commented, thinking of Sam rather than Alex and Heph (probably because of the "running ahead"-theme I've here taken up). When you let me know that you never could identify with a servant (or something like that). Not that I intended it that way, as I'm sure you know now. But at the time it didn't seem a good idea to post it…
Thanks for commenting! As for visualizing, I guess it helps to have the movie in the back of your mind… Am reading Bartimäus these days, will comment soon; and saw Beowulf yesterday, ditto…
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Sad how 'they' becomes 'he', how the hardship of slipping an crawling suddenly becomes a beautiful yet terrible view from the top and how the only friendly soul quietly lags behind. And how at the moment of climax/victory, the one on top is always alone....
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What did I say about Sam? *is curious*
the moment of climax" and "the one on top" indeed!
Your mind is in the gutter, I intended nothing of the sort...... LMAO!
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About Sam, that was after you'd written "Lethargy" and I'd commented, thinking of Sam rather than Alex and Heph (probably because of the "running ahead"-theme I've here taken up). When you let me know that you never could identify with a servant (or something like that). Not that I intended it that way, as I'm sure you know now. But at the time it didn't seem a good idea to post it…
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Nicely done, I could easily visualise this in my head.
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Am reading Bartimäus these days, will comment soon; and saw Beowulf yesterday, ditto…
:-)
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