This is beautiful. I'm actually especially fond of the first half - it takes a lot of courage to delve so deeply and for so long into what pre-Fall Heaven must have been like, because it's so alien and so difficult to relate to, but you do it very well. You make us feel what Gabriel's missing, in the withdrawal of God, in leaving Heaven, in Lucifer's discordant voice. And putting so much work into the relationship between Gabriel and Lucifer makes the final blow that much harder.
Interestingly ambiguous ending, though! I was wondering where you were going with the whole Loki-is-still-in-there thread, and am curious about how it ended. Are you planning on writing a sequel, or is it To Be Imagined?
Thank you so much! You have no idea how many times I hated myself for deciding to to try writing Heaven, it was a lot harder than I'd anticipated. I have to say that I'm a bit more fond of the first part myself. Writing the second part felt like if I said too much I was just repeating the obvious, or if I said too little like I was just doing a summary of what happened. I tried to find some sort of balance in between.
This ending is definitely of the To Be Imagined variety. Honestly I'm not sure what happens next, there's some vague ideas what Loki might have done, but nothing solid at all. I do know neither of them is quite gone. But I'm very bad with sequels, I might plan to write them, but then never really get to it.
Then I shall cheerfully imagine that Loki faked the death in a way that Lucifer couldn't have anticipated because, however well he might have known Gabriel, he did not know Loki, and therefore Gabriel is happily running around somewhere being all alive and sneaky. -nods firmly-
Oh my goodness, this is beautiful. Your prose throughout the story is just gorgeous -- you do an amazing job of balancing a clear and distinct voice for Gabriel that feels right and carries through from when he's an archangel in Heaven to the end. And it's also just haunting and lyrical and pitch perfect in its own right; there are so many phrases and places in here where the language seems to restrain itself in just right the moments, to get the full impact of the thought and then launches back into this graceful constructions. I'm not sure how much sense I'm making right now, but yes, really spectacular writing
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Thank you so much for the amazingly nice things you're saying. :) Honestly, I was quite worried at times that there would be too much of a discrepancy between the Gabriel at the end of the story and Gabriel in Heaven
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Interestingly ambiguous ending, though! I was wondering where you were going with the whole Loki-is-still-in-there thread, and am curious about how it ended. Are you planning on writing a sequel, or is it To Be Imagined?
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This ending is definitely of the To Be Imagined variety. Honestly I'm not sure what happens next, there's some vague ideas what Loki might have done, but nothing solid at all. I do know neither of them is quite gone. But I'm very bad with sequels, I might plan to write them, but then never really get to it.
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