I can tell that English probably isn't your first language. I deal with a lot of foreign authors who write fairly well but mix up tenses and such. I am seeing the same mistakes here. However, they aren't enough to actually detract from the story line.
I am enjoying Draco's scheming and Harry's bashfulness, even though it's perfectly obvious that he would like nothing more than for Draco to throw him to the ground and ride him like an Arabian. And the bit about Millie being fantastic at fellatio? Priceless! I bet Blaise isn't going to leave her alone now. Not until he's had a bit of a go with her.
Your Ginny is very vindictive. I think that Draco should watch his back. Or have Harry watch it for him...
You are right, English is defintely not my first language and yes, I'm always mixing up my tenses even when I try not to. It annoys me really. I never notice them until someone points it out then i'd be like ARGH!!!!
I enjoyed writting it and glad that you like it too and Milli and Blaise... Hehehe actually it was because of them that the story was born. I have no idea why I came to daydream about the conversation.
As for Ginny, hmm, maybe that's just me coz I actually didn't like that they ended up together in the end. I prefered it it to be Luna :-V Wel, that's just me. I hope that you will enjoy the next installmwnt to and hopefully you won't find as much mistakes ^^ thank you for reading and commenting ♥
Well, I work with German, Polish and Chinese authors, so I have learned what to look for. My suggestion is that you find a beta reader who can catch those mistakes and will take the time to explain certain things to you. It will definitely help you out.
It was born because of Millicent and Blaise? That's a scary idea. I would rather think that it was born because Draco was intrigued that Harry had turned into a kissing monster. =P
And I agree with you on Ginny. She never deserved Harry. I prefer him with Draco or, if it has to be a Weasley, Charlie. =P
You work with German, Polish and Chinese authors? As in your paying job? that would be WOW... or are you a beta? that would be WOW too.. I know it sounds stupid but I am kinda shy to show my writing. I mean, just posting it up is somewhat not personal? what am I saying? please ignore me and maybe I really should have someone look over it.
hehe... I'm a little weird like that. You know how sometimes, you have the ending of a fiction but it doesn't have a body to it. Yeah, it's always like that with me.. Heh, even if Harry didn't turn out to be a kissing monster, I think Draco would still be intrigued with Harry one way or another *grins*
Oohh... Harry and Charlie... now that would have been better ^^
I agree with the previous comments, the errors are fairly minor and didn't detract from the story, which I am enjoying reading very much. It is interesting to watch Harry start to question his fascination with Malfoy. Is he finally realising that there is a wealth of UST there already I wonder?! I am looking forward to the next chapter.
you are doing really quite well, I know many native English speakers that sound like completely illiterate monkeys compared to you! and to answer your question, UST is the acronym for unresolved sexual tension :)
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I am enjoying Draco's scheming and Harry's bashfulness, even though it's perfectly obvious that he would like nothing more than for Draco to throw him to the ground and ride him like an Arabian. And the bit about Millie being fantastic at fellatio? Priceless! I bet Blaise isn't going to leave her alone now. Not until he's had a bit of a go with her.
Your Ginny is very vindictive. I think that Draco should watch his back. Or have Harry watch it for him...
Looking forward to the next installment.
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I enjoyed writting it and glad that you like it too and Milli and Blaise... Hehehe actually it was because of them that the story was born. I have no idea why I came to daydream about the conversation.
As for Ginny, hmm, maybe that's just me coz I actually didn't like that they ended up together in the end. I prefered it it to be Luna :-V
Wel, that's just me. I hope that you will enjoy the next installmwnt to and hopefully you won't find as much mistakes ^^ thank you for reading and commenting ♥
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It was born because of Millicent and Blaise? That's a scary idea. I would rather think that it was born because Draco was intrigued that Harry had turned into a kissing monster. =P
And I agree with you on Ginny. She never deserved Harry. I prefer him with Draco or, if it has to be a Weasley, Charlie. =P
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hehe... I'm a little weird like that. You know how sometimes, you have the ending of a fiction but it doesn't have a body to it. Yeah, it's always like that with me.. Heh, even if Harry didn't turn out to be a kissing monster, I think Draco would still be intrigued with Harry one way or another *grins*
Oohh... Harry and Charlie... now that would have been better ^^
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Here is a question... What is UST?
I hope you'll like the next chapter too. Thank you for reading and commenting love ^^
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WOW! Love this so far! :D
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