HMD - How's my driving?

[tobereaped]

 How well do I play as Dean? Constructive criticism wanted and flames will not be tolerated. So comment away!

Comments

[devil_in_you]

I personally have enjoyed RPing with you. I also play Sammy_psychic and featherandwings (Cas) and from what we have tossed back and forth it's been pretty awesome. The only thing I'd warn against is keeping Dean permanently in this episode only as that tends to lead off towards difficulty in plotting later on or having multiple RPs with the same characters (such as if Demon!Deano over here came back). Well unless of course this is an AU where Dean's stuck in acoma for much longer than in said episode.

But anyways, aside from that I think you're doing really well; always answer quickly and it's fun bantering off your Dean.

[tobereaped]

Yeah, I think this is an AU version. To make it less boring I've given him powers like the ability to move outside of the hospital and move through things basing on the fact that he is closer to death than the canon version.

Thank you for the critique and you are fun to RP with too :)

[fallen_hunter79]

You;re doing pretty good, there's just a few things I would change. Don't quote the show, I've made that mistake before and it always sounds a little forced. Sarcasm and snark are you friends, as are contractions. Also Dean doesn't exactly say everything he's thinking or feeling. He can be hurt or annoyed but outside just smirk and play the tough guy. He doesn't always do that mind you, but I felt you have him stating his thoughts a lot. Especially because you've taken him from the beginning of season two, he's still stuck in trying to be macho awesome that he was in season one, he hasn't been broken down as much.

[tobereaped]

Yeah, I'm definitely guilty of writing in lines of the show and I can here him say it.

Yeah, I guess I've been a little to open with him but I don't want him to cut everyone off. I'm not sure where to put the snark in because I don't think the situations have called for it (unless he's talking to Eris.)

Thanks for the honesty and I'll try my best to change him but I'm not sure about where the snark is required :/

[fallen_hunter79]

He tends to use snark when he's uncomfortable, when he feels backed into a corner or vulnerable. He usually uses it in inappropriate places because he doesn't like people to see how he's feeling. He won't use it with someone like Sam for the most part unless he's pissed or pushed too far that he starts to shut down and his walls go up.

[tobereaped]

I see, I'm trying to use it more often now when I feel like he would use it like with people he doesn't particularly like.

Thanks again :)