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[tolarian]

Anyone feel like offering criticism on an essay?

A roughly 500 word long piece on a three-page section of Aldous Huxley's Brave New World, and its relevance to the novel as a whole. For the most, it discusses the theme of the shallow, uniform existence lived by the majority of the novel's characters, using Lenina and Henry as case examples. Due

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[cirakaite]

Short & sweet- I think you picked the right points to expand upon, and have the right combination of analysis/description for a short piece, which is the most difficult thing to get right when you have to explain what you're talking about. Love your phrasing, as always, but will refrain from going into raptures over it ;)

One minor nitpick: "Drugged with soma, "bottled"," - I would swap those two around, just for flow, because the phrase made me blink at it stupidly for a second. Not that most things don't ;)

[meltel]

I'd love to, but you know you are like a million times better than I at english, so it sounds great to me!