LJ Idol Season 10 - Week Eight: No Comment

[tonithegreat]

She sits in a camp chair at the edge of the water, toes in the river, contemplative. Two and a half years now that she's been back in this place, at the edge of the gulf. Half the reason for the move back was family. They'd needed to slow down, to make time for the important things together

Comments

[rayaso]

This was really wonderful, so thoughtful and with such great descriptions. I loved the ambiguity of the ending as well. Very nice job!

[tonithegreat]

Thank you kindly! Sometimes little vignettes refuse not to be awkward, but I was happy with the structure here.

[shadowwolf13]

<3

[tonithegreat]

😀 Thanks!

[i_17bingo]

You illustrated the setting so vividly it got me thinking about visiting my family in Florida, as well as all the beautiful places where I've seen sunsets. This was a beautiful snapshot of a moment.

[tonithegreat]

Thanks! I just talked to my mom this morning and I am overdue for a visit to the end of the road.

[soldevenus]

I was really transported to that place at the edge of the gulf. Love the use if language and tone and the larger questions it explores.

[tonithegreat]

❤️ Thank you, my friend! We should go for a boat ride there one day, maybe find some dolphins to swim with.

[halfshellvenus]

A nice, atmospheric description here, not only of the place but of the difficult questions that arise when we weight imperfect choices, or the imperfection (not bad, but rarely perfect) that generally is life.

[tonithegreat]

Thanks for the thoughtful comment. It's really good to be in a place where I can examine these thoughts and emotions without anxiety that I somehow missed some magical golden answer that would have perfected everything.