LJ Idol - Week 6: Solvitur ambulando

[tonithegreat]

The rock that she carried felt like it had become part of her hand. Numb fingers became one with cold sharp stone. The rock was a weapon and with it clutched tightly in her grip, so was she. No one would pry it away from her. And no one would take the stolen settlers’ supplies that she carried without feeling it’s edge. Not if she retained the

Comments

[rayaso]

This was a wonderful juxtaposition, between the cold and hungry Trahlyta and the over-warm, well-fed family whose worry is whether they will be out of cell phone range. Very nicely done and so well written.

[tonithegreat]

Thank you! This was a weird one for me, because I had something sad to say but didn’t want it to be too depressing. I’m glad you enjoyed.

[bleodswean]

I utterly adore this and I love love love this sort of juxtaposition! I also think it's great that you included children because I often think children are the ones who imagine lives come before in the very place they are currently standing! Great stuff here!

[tonithegreat]

Thank you kindly! You’ve done some great juxtapositions so it means a lot.

[roina_arwen]

Interesting piece and I like the accompanying factoid!

[tonithegreat]

Thanks!

[murielle]

Yes!

I'm not familiar with the legend, but I'm hoping you will tell us more. Will Ari and her girls encounter Trahlyta? :-)

Brava!

[tonithegreat]

Thank you kindly!

[halfshellvenus]

I liked the contrasts in these two settings. I find myself wondering whether Trahylta died on that mountain sooner rather than later, or whether she decided to follow after her family in the spring.

[tonithegreat]

It’s so hard with the fragments here! Finding the right amount of keeping interest versus keeping attention. I’m glad this was enough to make you wonder.