Comments | tonithegreat: LJ Idol Week 11: Wild Goose Chase

tonithegreat

LJ Idol Week 11: Wild Goose Chase

Jan 15, 2020 18:30

Ariadne has been tired all day, but something always wakes up in her as she settles into her evening run. This morning when she got up, her feet and ankles were still sore from her longer run a few days ago, but now it feels like her body’s warming up to this. Her steps don’t hurt, though her side is aching a little. She straightens her torso and ( Read more... )

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roina_arwen January 20 2020, 23:21:12 UTC

Ooooh.... great description here, it really set the mood. I need to know what happens next!

tonithegreat January 22 2020, 00:18:30 UTC

Thank you! And thanks for the early comment. I’m worried about getting all the reading done with this double week happening!

millysdaughter January 24 2020, 02:29:40 UTC

Yikes!

tonithegreat January 26 2020, 23:21:19 UTC

I started out thinking this was going to be dark, but then I lightened it up, but maybe not enough. Hopefully it’s not an annoying trope to end with a semi-cliffhanger.

rayaso January 24 2020, 16:19:11 UTC

There's nothing like someone with bat wings to add some spice to a run. I enjoyed reading the mindset of a runner. Really good job!

tonithegreat January 26 2020, 23:22:44 UTC

Thanks! I feel like an eternal beginner runner these days, myself. I’m glad that side of things came through.

halfshellvenus January 25 2020, 09:28:10 UTC

She can’t help looking around embarrassed. This is why everyone uses earbuds.
Hahahaha! Those 'motivational' reassurances from apps (or exercise videos) are just SO annoying, and so chirpy.

I liked the ending of this, a little magic in an ordinary world and it makes me wonder who or what she has come across. :)

tonithegreat January 26 2020, 23:30:13 UTC

It’s true! Almost ten years ago I used a set of exercise videos for several months with some regularity and occasionally I still try to do that workout, and the chirpy motivational patter is still burned into my brain for some of the exercises!

I started this with the idea that I wanted to tread the line between actually finding magic and wishing really hard for magic, but then I decided that actually finding magic would be more interesting. Although now I’ve set myself up to write an info-dumpy bit next. . .

karmasoup January 25 2020, 20:40:22 UTC

Well... this certainly took a twist I didn't see coming!