LJ Idol - Week 13: Fan Death

[tonithegreat]

I’m thinking of her now because it seems very likely that I’ll soon be loosing her. Ariel’s presence in our lives has been one of the few constants over the last several years, and as strange as her appearance was, I know I’m going to miss her fiercely.

***We found her on the wrack line

Comments

[static_abyss]

This is so interesting. I definitely want to know what happens next. You have such a lovely buildup here to a great mystery. Excellent job!

[tonithegreat]

Thank you! I want to work more with this. I have some of what will come next sketched in.

[bleodswean]

Ooooh! Is this the start of something more intricate??? It's fantastically detailed and has left me wanting to know what it was that jogged her memory. Although, I'm feeling that I should know who Ariel is....

[tonithegreat]

Thank you! I have some ideas on what the jog was, and a sketch as to what happened but I am missing some key pieces still. But the details were enough fun, I want to come back to this. Writing idol length is hard for me.

[gingergirlslove]

Very well written. I'm definitely intrigued to know who she is!

[tonithegreat]

Thank you for this!

[banana_galaxy]

Oh man, cliffhanger! Really curious about what jogged her memory too.

[tonithegreat]

I think I know how that scene’s going to go! I bet there’ll be a prompt for it.

[rayaso]

What a wonderful story that has plenty of potential for sequels. Some stories are better left with a little mystery at the end. Excellent writing and imagination.

[tonithegreat]

It’s always hard to walk the line between too long and not enough story to be satisfying here. But life usually prevents me from having enough time to flesh things out too too much.