Comments | torriee: [fic] No way to say, RxR, PG-15

torriee

[fic] No way to say, RxR, PG-15

Feb 08, 2009 18:00

Tittle : No way to say
Pairing : ReitaxRuki
Author : ( Read more... )

Comments 10

kawasakininja February 9 2009, 18:55:30 UTC

I see you have a beta reader but English was still strange. I think the main problem was in the present tense you used to write this. Usually when people write stories they use past tense. It seems more natural somehow. I know people use present tense sometimes, but it is much harder to make it work in the story. The ending with Reita so easily accepting Ruki's discovery was little unbelievable. I know you wanted to wrap it up but it just seemed little bit too fast. Please don't be sad or offended. This is a constructive criticism. I know it's not easy to write fanfiction especially in a language which isn't your mother tongue, I personally found it too much of a trouble myself so I'm just reading them now.

rukana February 10 2009, 03:44:26 UTC

I was proofing this at an ungodly hour and I've gone back and read it and am just now catching my mistakes. (-_-);;; Made me feel like crap, but I'll do better next time. I vow on that one. *determined look*

torriee February 14 2009, 08:11:05 UTC

i still love you zozo X3~

rukana February 16 2009, 05:30:21 UTC

Aw~, yay~! (^3^)
I love you too, Tori~!!!! (^______________^)

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micukofelton February 9 2009, 19:47:54 UTC

awwww, cute, loved it ^^

torriee February 14 2009, 08:11:45 UTC

thank you for reading ^^

notetoself09 February 14 2009, 01:39:17 UTC

this was exactly the type of reita/ruki fic i wanted to read! AMAZING! I loved it!<333

torriee February 14 2009, 08:12:17 UTC

thank you very much.. glad u like it ^^

srie89 March 6 2009, 16:35:48 UTC

TOROROR!
hwewe... sorry for the laaatteee comment! jah, finally you wrote this ne? :D

oke torijon, knp ruki lo cemburuan yaa heheh..
terancam br plg pas libur semester*