All Stars Week Two: Transcend

[toxic_apiaceae]

This is a continuation from week one.  WARNINGS: mention of raped and drug use and human trafficking/flesh trade.  I wouldn't recommend reading this at work.

Comments

[belluminabyssus]

Ooooof. How utterly unpleasant. Not the writing, of course -- the subject matter. But it's not gratuitous, it's done tastefully, and although it's distasteful to think about something like this occurring in real life, it really is very nicely done here. I'm interested in knowing what Willisa really thinks about all this -- how much does she actually know? Is she merely putting the horrible truth out of her mind because she's so desperate for a baby? I find the couple very intriguing -- as much as I find the girl intriguing.

I'm so, so glad to see you writing again! I know I said that last time, but I'm going to say it again. Hooray!

[toxic_apiaceae]

Haha! I'm tastefully distasteful, eh? I like that. I like that a lot.

Honestly, I feel like I could have pushed this story further. I feel like maybe some of the grit this story needed was sacrificed for ... elegance? Polish? I don't know what I'm trying to say, just that I think maybe I went too tame with this installment.

But next week -- next week, I'll be making up for it. *NODS*

And I'm very glad you're enjoying it, even if it's a bit on the painful side. Despite being awful to write, I really am enjoying these characters and how disgusting they are (with the exception of the girl). Willisa's probably my favorite because there is SO MUCH sadism in her, and she doesn't even realize it because she's so selfish. I hate her, but at the same time she's been very interesting to write.

[belluminabyssus]

I think you did just fine with this. I don't think it was tame at all -- although, of course, I don't know quite what you feel you left out or held back. I like Willisa so far, because I'm sure there's a lot of layers of her character that we, the readers, haven't really even begun to touch yet.

How many parts do you think this story'll have?

[toxic_apiaceae]

I'm thinking it'll conclude with the next prompt, though I could see this expanding a little further still from where next week would leave things. Besides, it doesn't look like I'll survive to next week so it seems a good time to end things. *nods*

[keppiehed]

Ooh! Oooh! I want more! I want to know so much more about Willisa and Edgamund and and and ... you are not done. SOO not done. *goes to vote right now*