I really liked this piece! You have some really beautiful turns of phrase, especially when describing her father's attitude toward her. and the "star without a consellation"--Beautiful! Really, this is a very good draft.
Actually, it reminded me of a story I wrote some time ago--it's totally different, but your story sparked the memory of it, and now I'm going to check on DA and see if I have it posted. I might. If not, though, I will post it immediately.
thanks for the good read! ^_^ I look forward to where you'll take this story. Then ending is very enticing. ^_^
=D Thankees....not sure if I'm actually going to continue this. :/ I'll talk to you about it when you're online next :) I'll read the second part of that story tonight methinks...love the word baubles lol.
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Actually, it reminded me of a story I wrote some time ago--it's totally different, but your story sparked the memory of it, and now I'm going to check on DA and see if I have it posted. I might. If not, though, I will post it immediately.
thanks for the good read! ^_^ I look forward to where you'll take this story. Then ending is very enticing. ^_^
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I'll read the second part of that story tonight methinks...love the word baubles lol.
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