Week 2: I Know I Am, I'm Sure I Am

[louis_quatorze]

Challenge: Write from a first-person perspective
Title (if applicable): I Know I Am, I'm Sure I Am
Author: Abby
Rating: PG-13 for language
Series: Star Trek XI
Characters/Pairings: Sulu, gen

Notes: The Seattle Sounders FC and the San Jose Earthquakes are Major League Soccer teams. Football in the future is a bit of a thing for me.

Comments

[echoinautumn]

I squealed a little when I saw this, because it's such a nifty, inventive little thing. I can see a few grammatical things here and there (you use commas like I do, to imply verbal stops). I like the feel, the voice, that this has, as a nostalgic sort of genfic. The flow of memory comes nicely and very naturally.

[louis_quatorze]

Thanks! (I need to work on commas. And pauses/asides in general. I'm addicted.)

[alldoubtaboutit]

Awww homesick Sulu makes me feel kind of homesick as well. Sulu in a onesie!kit is such an adorable image. <3