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Fic: Midway (for fic_faery)

Apr 14, 2008 21:43

Author/Artist: tokyocentricity
For: Crys (fic_faery)

Title: Midway
Characters: Atobe Keigo, Oshitari Yuushi, Shishido Ryou
Rating: PG-13

Disclaimer: The characters portrayed in this story do not belong to the author and are not being used for profit. ♥
Warnings: Rated for very light language, mild innuendo and kissing.
Summary: Atobe and Oshitari cut their baby a break ( Read more... )

character: oshitari, ! fic, character: shishido, character: atobe

Comments 3

fic_faery April 14 2008, 16:37:11 UTC

That was very adorable. Shishido being oblivious to the planning and scheming of his boyfriends in the start and then his pure joy at being at an amusement park was too cute.

I really enjoyed the way you wrote the three boys, they all had distinct personalities without falling into fandom cliches. I did feel a bit sorry for Atobe though, his poor pride, taken down by a bunch of 'deathtraps'.

Brilliant job, and I'm so happy that you chose this threesome to write.

polyurethane April 14 2008, 21:12:46 UTC

THIS.

WAS.

AWESOME.

♥

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I loved this:

Not to be left out, Shishido loosened his grip on Atobe still further and leaned in to drop an awkward kiss to the corner of his mouth. With Oshitari so close that Shishido could feel his breath on his cheek, Atobe broke away and turned to kiss Shishido properly, taking him by surprise. Just as Shishido was remembering how to kiss back, Oshitari found his ear with kisses so soft, Shishido could barely stand it.

It was so... beautiful. I'd love to see it drawn to be honest. It's just something that while beautiful as words would be equally beautiful as a drawing.

And the three of them making out on a ferris wheel? Awesome.

I could quote a lot more, but I'd probably be quoting it all.

Great job, Anon-san! :D

jazzy_peaches April 14 2008, 22:25:02 UTC

to the tune of Atobe's objections - Shishido was counting on it being a familiar melody by the end of the day

I love this line.

"Exactly," Atobe replied, not missing a beat. "That's why we thought we had to make up for it."

Shishido paused, confused. "Make up for what?"

"Being better than you."

LOL.

This was AWESOME. So made of win. <333333333